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To: Udo Erdelhoff <ue@nathan.ruhr.de>
Cc: "Bruce A. Mah" <bmah@freebsd.org>, freebsd-sparc@freebsd.org,
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Subject: Re: FreeBSD/sparc64 install document active in -CURRENT 
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   message dated "Thu, 14 Mar 2002 19:56:48 +0100."
From: bmah@freebsd.org (Bruce A. Mah)
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If memory serves me right, Udo Erdelhoff wrote:

Good job...I can't believe I left off so many closing tags (admittedly 
I wasn't looking for them).  Two minor things...

> @@ -139,12 +139,10 @@
>  	on the keyboard, or send a
>          <command>BREAK</command> over the serial console (using for
>          example <command>~#</command> in &man.tip.1; or &man.cu.1;) to
> -        get to the PROM prompt.  It looks like
> +        get to the PROM prompt.  It looks like this:</para>
>  
> -        <screen>ok </screen>
> -        or
> -        <screen>ok {0} </screen>
> -        (on SMP systems).</para>
> +        <screen><prompt>ok     </prompt>      (systems with one CPU)
> +<prompt>ok {0} </prompt>      (SMP systems)</screen>

Can we get "(systems with one CPU)" and "(SMP systems)" outside the 
<screen></screen> element?  They're explanatory text, not literal stuff 
that shows up on the screen.  Not sure if there's an easy way to do 
this.

> @@ -242,7 +240,7 @@
>    :rp="<replaceable>tftp-server-ip-address</replaceable>:<replaceable>nfs-ro
> ot-directory</replaceable>":\
>    :sm=<replaceable>ip-netmask</replaceable>
>  
> -&lt;name of the entry>:\
> +<replaceable>name of the entry</replaceable>:\
>    ha=<replaceable>sparc64-ethernet-address</replaceable>:ip=<replaceable>spa
> rc64-ip-address</replaceable>:tc=.default</programlisting>

I went through a little bit of work to make sure all of the multi-word
replaceables had hyphens separating the words.  "name of entry" should
probably be "name-of-entry" to be consistent with this.

Other than these, I have no changes to suggest.

Thanks!

Bruce.



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