From owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Tue Apr 8 02:21:06 2003 Return-Path: Delivered-To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.FreeBSD.org (mx1.freebsd.org [216.136.204.125]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id EAD2537B401; Tue, 8 Apr 2003 02:21:06 -0700 (PDT) Received: from freebsd.org.ru (www.freebsd.org.ru [194.84.67.5]) by mx1.FreeBSD.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id EE17E43FCB; Tue, 8 Apr 2003 02:21:05 -0700 (PDT) (envelope-from osa@freebsd.org.ru) Received: by freebsd.org.ru (Postfix, from userid 1000) id BDA745D; Tue, 8 Apr 2003 13:21:03 +0400 (MSD) Date: Tue, 8 Apr 2003 13:21:03 +0400 From: "Sergey A. Osokin" To: Murray Stokely Message-ID: <20030408092103.GD4389@freebsd.org.ru> References: <200304080249.h382ntN0091603@freefall.freebsd.org> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Disposition: inline In-Reply-To: <200304080249.h382ntN0091603@freefall.freebsd.org> User-Agent: Mutt/1.5.4i cc: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: docs/50677: [PATCH] update doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.sgml X-BeenThere: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.1 Precedence: list Reply-To: osa@FreeBSD.org.ru List-Id: Documentation project List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Tue, 08 Apr 2003 09:21:07 -0000 On Mon, Apr 07, 2003 at 07:49:55PM -0700, Murray Stokely wrote: > Synopsis: [PATCH] update doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.sgml > > State-Changed-From-To: open->feedback > State-Changed-By: murray > State-Changed-When: Mon Apr 7 19:46:21 PDT 2003 > State-Changed-Why: > Arghh.. I just lost my extensive comments about this patch. The short > of it is that this doesn't even validate (missing tags, etc..) and the > English is ambiguous. I think every sentence needs revision. Here is > the last bit of my previous comment that I was able to salvage from my > editor on freefall : > > "The NEWCARD implementation for PC-card does not work for me." .. > > Also, The cbb0 line might be better if enclosed in . > > I won't go on, but each entry needs extensive grammatical improvement > as well as some markup changes. > > Maybe someone else can work with you to improve the English? > > It would be nice to add these technical issues to the FAQ. > > Thanks for your time spent writing this up. Your contributions are > appreciated. > > http://www.freebsd.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=50677 OK, please review next version of patch http://ozz.pp.ru/patches/patch-faq Thanks. -- Rgdz, /"\ ASCII RIBBON CAMPAIGN Sergey Osokin aka oZZ, \ / AGAINST HTML MAIL http://ozz.pp.ru/ X AND NEWS / \