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Date: Fri, 03 Jan 2003 15:23:35 -0500 (EST)
From: John Baldwin <jhb@FreeBSD.org>
To: Ceri Davies <setantae@submonkey.net>
Subject: Re: request for review
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On 03-Jan-2003 Ceri Davies wrote:
> On Fri, Jan 03, 2003 at 07:59:36PM +0000, Ceri Davies wrote:
> +     <td>Absolute BSD.  This book discusses management of
> +     FreeBSD-based servers in an enterprise, high-performance
> +     environment.
> 
> Add another comma after "high-performance".

Why?  One doesn't normally put commas between adjectives and the
nouns they describe.  I might write "the green, fast car", but
I wouldn't write "the green, car" or "the green, fast, car".

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