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Author: wblock
Date: Mon Apr 18 14:27:33 2016
New Revision: 48667
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/48667

Log:
  Simplify and shorten some of the introductory paragraphs for sections of
  the website.  It is not clear why these are included in the stylesheet
  rather than being separate and more specific files.

Modified:
  head/share/xml/libcommon.xsl

Modified: head/share/xml/libcommon.xsl
==============================================================================
--- head/share/xml/libcommon.xsl	Mon Apr 18 13:55:20 2016	(r48666)
+++ head/share/xml/libcommon.xsl	Mon Apr 18 14:27:33 2016	(r48667)
@@ -253,11 +253,11 @@
 
     <p>Submissions should be in HTML. In keeping with the spirit of
       FreeBSD, we prefer user groups that are active and which conduct
-      their business in public.  If you can't find a group near you,
-      please consider finding other interested individuals near you
-      through <a
-      href="http://bsd.meetup.com/">http://bsd.meetup.com/</a> and
-      forming your own user group.</p>
+      their business in public.  If there is no local group,
+      <a
+      href="http://bsd.meetup.com/">http://bsd.meetup.com/</a> can
+      be used to locate interested individuals near by.  Consider
+      forming your own user group!</p>
 
     <h3>Regions:</h3>
   </xsl:template>
@@ -453,10 +453,9 @@
 
     <p>FreeBSD is a rapidly developing operating system.  Keeping up on
       the latest developments can be a chore!  To keep on top of things,
-      be sure and check this page periodically.  Also, you may wish to
-      subscribe to the
+      check this page periodically.  News is also announced on the
       <a href="https://lists.FreeBSD.org/mailman/listinfo/freebsd-announce">freebsd-announce
-	mailing list</a> or the <a href="rss.xml">RSS feed</a>.</p>
+	mailing list</a> and the <a href="rss.xml">RSS feed</a>.</p>
 
     <p>The following projects have their own news pages, which should
       be checked for project specific updates.</p>
@@ -470,8 +469,8 @@
       see the <a href="&base;/releases/index.html">Release Information</a>
       page.</p>
 
-    <p>For FreeBSD security information and a list of available
-      Security Advisories, please refer to the
+    <p>FreeBSD security information and a list of available
+      Security Advisories are available on the
       <a href="&base;/security/">Security Information</a> page.</p>
   </xsl:template>
 
@@ -482,19 +481,18 @@
 
   <!-- template: "html-news-list-press-preface" -->
   <xsl:template name="html-news-list-press-preface">
-    <p>If you know of any news stories featuring FreeBSD that we have
-      not listed here, please send details to <a
-	href="mailto:freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org">freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org</a>
-      so that we can include them.</p>
+    <p>Please send details of any news stories featuring FreeBSD
+      to <a
+	href="mailto:freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org">freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org</a>.</p>
   </xsl:template>
 
   <xsl:template name="html-events-list-preface">
-    <p>If you know of any FreeBSD related events, or events that
-      are of interest for FreeBSD users, which are not listed here,
-      please send details to <a href="mailto:freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org"
-	>freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org</a>, so they can be included.</p>
+    <p>Please send details of any FreeBSD related events or events that
+      are of interest for FreeBSD users which are not listed here
+      to <a href="mailto:freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org"
+	>freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org</a>.</p>
 
-    <p>Users with organisational software that understands the
+    <p>Users with organizational software that uses the
       iCalendar format can subscribe to the
       <a href="&base;/events/events.ics">FreeBSD events calendar</a>
       which contains all of the events listed here.</p>