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From: Salvo Bartolotta <bartequi@inwind.it>
Date: Sat, 07 Oct 2000 20:15:37 GMT
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Subject: Incorrect expression in handbook. Possible solutions (?)
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Dear FreeBSD doc'ers,

While I was reading "The Cutting-Edge"(tm), I ran into the following
expression:

<blockquote>
This section will explain a bit about each and describe how to keep
your system up-to-date with each respective tree.
</blockquote>               ^^^^^^^^^^
                            ^^^^^^^^^^

The adjective "respective", which is used to premodify a noun phrase
in order to indicate segregatory interpretation of a preceding
conjoint noun phrase, requires a **plural** noun head. Possible
replacements:


<workaround I>
"This section will explain a bit about each and describe how to keep
your system up-to-date with each tree [respectively]."


Here the "conjoint" (~ coordinated) noun phrase seems to be implicit:
"This section will explain a bit about each (of them: ie -STABLE and
-CURRENT,  considered individually) and describe how to keep your
system up-to-date with each tree (STABLE and CURRENT, considered
individually)."

This would suggest either using "respectively" or omitting the
segregatory adverb. I seem to understand that a segregatory meaning is
already expressed; which would probably make "respectively" redundant.

However, I am not quite sure that the sentence is fully correct: your
system -->(?) each tree [respectively].
</workaround I>



<workaround II>
"This section will explain a bit about each and describe how to keep a
 -CURRENT or -STABLE system up-to-date."
</workaround II>



<workaround III>
"This section will explain a bit about each and describe how to keep
your system up-to-date, whether you choose to run the former or the
latter.
</workaround III>

HTH,
Salvo





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