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From: Joel Dahl <joel@automatvapen.se>
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On Wed, 2004-11-17 at 22:27 +0000, Murray Stokely wrote: 
> Hi Joel, thanks for the submissions.  I've noticed that many of your
> submissions don't use a serial comma so they stick out when compared
> with the rest of our documentation set.

Ok, thanks.

> 
> >         <glossterm>Unix File System Version 2</glossterm>
> >         <acronym>UFS2</acronym>
> >         <glossdef>
> >  -        <para></para>
> >  +        <para>An extension to <acronym>UFS1</acronym>, introduced in
> >  +	  &os; 5-CURRENT. <acronym>UFS2</acronym> adds 64 bit block
> >  +	  pointers (breaking the 1T barrier), support for extended file
> >  +	  storage, and a few other things.
> 
> extended file attributes, and other enhancements. ?

Yes, this description is weak. Feel free to replace "a few other things" to
something better.

> >  +	  </para>
> >         </glossdef>
> >     </glossdiv>
> >  @@ -1762,7 +1775,10 @@
> >         <glossterm>Virtual Private Network</glossterm>
> >         <acronym>VPN</acronym>
> >         <glossdef>
> >  -        <para></para>
> >  +        <para>A way to use a public telecommunication
> >  +	  infrastructure, such as the Internet, to provide remote
> >  +	  users with a secure connection to their organizations
> 
> organization's ?

"to provide users with a secure connection to a remote network" maybe?

--
Joel