Date: Sun, 14 Jul 1996 00:24:08 -0400 (EDT) From: Tim Vanderhoek <hoek@freenet.hamilton.on.ca> To: Tim Vanderhoek <hoek@freenet.hamilton.on.ca> Cc: "Jordan K. Hubbard" <jkh@time.cdrom.com>, doc@freebsd.org, www@freebsd.org Subject: Re: Anyone up for a little triage on http://www.freebsd.org/about.html? Message-ID: <Pine.SOL.3.91.960714001909.11177A-100000@james.freenet.hamilton.on.ca> In-Reply-To: <Pine.SOL.3.91.960712210954.28209A-100000@james.freenet.hamilton.on.ca>
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On Fri, 12 Jul 1996, Tim Vanderhoek wrote: > > The overall style of our current version isn't so bad so much as is > > the content - I don't think that trumpeting "PRE-EMPTIVE > > MULTITASKING!" is, for example, quite as effective as citing some more I was going to say one other thing, but it seems to have had slipped... If you do nothing else to the welcome.html file, change the first line after the heading "Availability" near the bottom. "You might expect to pay a considerable sum of money for all the performance and features of FreeBSD, but thanks..." It just screams "INFOMERCIAL" at me (things which generally don't rank too high in credability, it seems). Possibly, "While the perfomance and features of FreeBSD are worth a considerable amount, thanks to..." Which isn't incredibly better, but seems to be an improvement (from here, anyways). -- Outnumbered? Maybe. Outspoken? Never! tIM...HOEk
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