From owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Wed Dec 3 21:26:01 2008 Return-Path: Delivered-To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.freebsd.org (mx1.freebsd.org [IPv6:2001:4f8:fff6::34]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id E47E5106564A for ; Wed, 3 Dec 2008 21:26:01 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from sonic2000gr@gmail.com) Received: from nf-out-0910.google.com (nf-out-0910.google.com [64.233.182.188]) by mx1.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 70CB78FC12 for ; Wed, 3 Dec 2008 21:26:01 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from sonic2000gr@gmail.com) Received: by nf-out-0910.google.com with SMTP id h3so1981480nfh.33 for ; Wed, 03 Dec 2008 13:26:00 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=gamma; h=domainkey-signature:received:received:message-id:date:from :user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject:references:in-reply-to :content-type:content-transfer-encoding; bh=nliKx7Q+LaRaGuxW8B7CQx+GShJKXQT6IzlyYDh2I7I=; b=ehX1DC0NX8F5R4RtYu4S43lPHzlSCcwqZGZ2Py0nVJ/d9+c7eCL0nBDqE/46MT6IQa 63deTTnzsciNEOL7DoB4a+AUAT56/DK5y5Bu1Qchsh9TFFtUK4mMuA07O5JfmKxuJCNv LfrA/ZLxkx2CBgfXxXo1XKIRRmrNesJc2xuHg= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=gmail.com; s=gamma; h=message-id:date:from:user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject :references:in-reply-to:content-type:content-transfer-encoding; b=qzn8XoPBDc4oIK70zDTcBBZLPnmk8S0HbrFI1Rw4qzyjpcyAwy6r/T6sUDWoSlG/ZD cUdt3Txb5eX77e8Dy+W+W7SnMAx6PwXubQa8BxqgSd7LITddAEAM9tHwf8zKRDoyfJwI 6/FeQ9FLC62TUX+gYmEu2P60jREidFS7+uEcQ= Received: by 10.210.81.10 with SMTP id e10mr15849317ebb.122.1228339560318; Wed, 03 Dec 2008 13:26:00 -0800 (PST) Received: from atlantis.dyndns.org (athedsl-285755.home.otenet.gr [85.73.163.217]) by mx.google.com with ESMTPS id c24sm7857436ika.9.2008.12.03.13.25.57 (version=TLSv1/SSLv3 cipher=RC4-MD5); Wed, 03 Dec 2008 13:25:58 -0800 (PST) Message-ID: <4936F963.7040201@gmail.com> Date: Wed, 03 Dec 2008 23:25:55 +0200 From: Manolis Kiagias User-Agent: Thunderbird 2.0.0.17 (X11/20081011) MIME-Version: 1.0 To: Gabor PALI References: <493155ED.8020004@FreeBSD.org> <49316309.1050407@gmail.com> <49330A66.8040801@FreeBSD.org> <20081201091730.0ef555fa.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> <49359784.504@FreeBSD.org> <49359EA1.3080600@gmail.com> <4936E15E.8000804@FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <4936E15E.8000804@FreeBSD.org> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Cc: Tom Rhodes , freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook X-BeenThere: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.5 Precedence: list List-Id: Documentation project List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Wed, 03 Dec 2008 21:26:02 -0000 Gabor PALI wrote: > Manolis Kiagias wrote: > >> I like the improvements too :) >> If I were to make a few changes (at the edge of these being doc-bikesheds): >> > > Absolutely not, it IS suggested by the FDP Primer [1]: > > ``Avoid redundant phrases > > Try not to use redundant phrases. In particular, "the command", "the > file", and "man command" are probably redundant.'' > > > Hopefully, I will reach this section of the FDP Primer in the Hungarian > translation soon :) Thanks for the comment! > > > I fixed the parts in question, so you can proof-check the results here: > > (in HTML:) > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH > > (in unified diff format:) > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/splash.screen.section.patch.diff > > > Regards, > :g > > [1] http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en/books/fdp-primer/writing-style.html > > Looks fine to me! I also tested the procedure on my Aspire One. Got the "may the source be with you" splash up in no time at all ;)