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From: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@ceid.upatras.gr>
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Subject: Re: docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the
	GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook.
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On 2005-08-27 12:26, "Gary W. Swearingen" <garys@opusnet.com> wrote:
> Julien Gabel <jpeg@thilelli.net> writes:
> >    <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly
> > -    created disk stripe.</para>
> > +    created disk stripe:</para>
>
> It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be
> redundant in sentences that ends with ":".
>
> In decreasing order of verbosity:
>
> The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created
> disk stripe.
>
> This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
>
> To manually mount a newly created disk stripe:

Right.  I usually prefer the style of the last one.  It contains all the
useful information and doesn't include redundant stuff.