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From: Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org>
To: Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook
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On Wed, 03 Dec 2008 23:25:55 +0200
Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> wrote:

> Gabor PALI wrote:
> > Manolis Kiagias wrote:
> >   
> >> I like the improvements too :)
> >> If I were to make a few changes (at the edge of these being doc-bikesheds):
> >>     
> >
> > Absolutely not, it IS suggested by the FDP Primer [1]:
> >
> > ``Avoid redundant phrases
> >
> > Try not to use redundant phrases. In particular, "the command", "the
> > file", and "man command" are probably redundant.''
> >
> >
> > Hopefully, I will reach this section of the FDP Primer in the Hungarian
> > translation soon :)  Thanks for the comment!
> >
> >
> > I fixed the parts in question, so you can proof-check the results here:
> >
> > (in HTML:)
> > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH
> >
> > (in unified diff format:)
> > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/splash.screen.section.patch.diff
> >
> >
> > Regards,
> > :g
> >
> > [1] http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en/books/fdp-primer/writing-style.html
> >
> >   
> Looks fine to me!
> I also tested the procedure on my Aspire One. Got the "may the source be
> with you" splash up in no time at all ;)
> 

Yes, this looks pretty good over here too.  Thanks!

-- 
Tom Rhodes