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From: Warren Block <wblock@wonkity.com>
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Subject: Re: docs/61628: Mistake in Handbook, section 8.6.4 passwd
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On Tue, 20 Jan 2004, Ceri Davies wrote:

>  > Users must type in ther original password before changing their
>  > password, to prevent an unauthorized person from changing their password
>  > when the user is away from their console.
>
>  Losing the comma would result in a grammatically correct, though
>  unwieldy, sentence.  The easiest way to deal with is to move "before
>  changing their password," to the beginning of the sentence.

Still unwieldy, though.  This may be a little better:

  To prevent accidental or unauthorized changes, the original password
  must be entered before a new password may be set.

(And "may be set" looks wrong, but it's late and I can't come up with
anything else except "assigned", which also looks wrong...)

-Warren Block * Rapid City, South Dakota USA