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From: "Gary W. Swearingen" <garys@FreeBSD.org>
Date: Thu, 15 Sep 2005 16:09:08 +0000 (UTC)
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garys       2005-09-15 16:09:08 UTC

  FreeBSD doc repository

  Modified files:
    en/docproj           sgml.sgml 
  Log:
  Changed various problems, mostly in wordage, including:
  = Changed "purists...that" to "purists...who".
  = Changed parenthetical explanation of "tags".
  = Changed "added" to "defined" since elements were not added.
  = Replaced awkward use of "related things".
  = Changed awkward non-possessive "<filename>'s" to
    "<filename> elements".
  = Removed too-restrictive "If you are familiar with them,".
  = Reworded "I found the best way" from anonymous page.
  = Removed "that" that referred to nothing.
  = Changed "have got" to "have".
  = Changed "they'll" to FDP's "they will".
  = Changed too-informal "stuff" to "version".
  = Removed erroneous "too" in small rewording that shortened a long
    sentence.
  = Removed unnecessary "You should".
  = Combined two paras on the same thing, changing "file" to "page".
  = Inserted apostrophe in "beginners".
  = Changed a quote char to an entity, twice.
  
  Approved by:    keramida
  
  Revision  Changes    Path
  1.25      +22 -23    www/en/docproj/sgml.sgml