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* Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org> [2003-05-28 11:57]:
> Greetings,
> 
> I've attached a patch for review.  This should be a drop-in replacement
> for the MS-DOS Q&A section in the troubleshooting section.  Any comments
> would be of a great help to me.
> 
> Thanks!
> 
> --
> Tom Rhodes


Hi Tom,

Here is my quick review.  Patching a patch gives me a headache
so I've just included the lines I'm interested in with my suggestion
below each one.


+	partition and allowing you to install onto the second free piece.
"data in the first half and allowing you to install &os; onto the other half." 

+	You first need too defragment your MS-DOS partition using the Windows&trade;
Incorrect use of "too"; use "to" here.

+	if you plan to add/remove operating systems often.  It does cost money, and if
Use "so" instead of "and" here.

+	<application>Double Space&trade;</application> application.  Therefor the file
"Therefore"

+	produce enough information too give an idea of the partition layout.</para>
Incorrect use of "too"; use "to" here.



Hope this helps,
jpb
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