From owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Sun Nov 30 21:49:40 2008 Return-Path: Delivered-To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.freebsd.org (mx1.freebsd.org [IPv6:2001:4f8:fff6::34]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 274271065676 for ; Sun, 30 Nov 2008 21:49:40 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from pali.gabor@googlemail.com) Received: from ey-out-2122.google.com (ey-out-2122.google.com [74.125.78.25]) by mx1.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id A3D548FC17 for ; Sun, 30 Nov 2008 21:49:39 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from pali.gabor@googlemail.com) Received: by ey-out-2122.google.com with SMTP id 6so887195eyi.7 for ; Sun, 30 Nov 2008 13:49:38 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=googlemail.com; s=gamma; h=domainkey-signature:received:received:message-id:date:from :organization:user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject:references :in-reply-to:x-enigmail-version:content-type :content-transfer-encoding:sender; bh=wFUrNi0wKc7gRP/2lZnZk1L7Y0xOTg7YkGDtNN/xPjI=; b=exDPgBf1AWEEYenZUzDnLL8ke4bNDHenLgwns1/2uUNDZfYw77ehzjqGcBZcDTqtFn uWNMJZnHgKD4TlD9mkDpwVfjQFwywwyCbsm0mLcq8crbM0b23rFZowAdBGpWxbAzvr9J 18gnAg7MZ3NkC3GJY9cGgs4F3vfF0eOZoqMA8= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=googlemail.com; s=gamma; h=message-id:date:from:organization:user-agent:mime-version:to:cc :subject:references:in-reply-to:x-enigmail-version:content-type :content-transfer-encoding:sender; b=lCxnn6qtkgFRsSyan7Urwwrj4njmyLpNlWeqRIkiP14rNBbXscx1VDbKFxmRfb7OsJ TAVPPEghF5Hjv431Ep06XY0d4uz02OAH9DnVgisai1xIhIcrTb6N+T3r7FyNX2G3ji9t tcwxzSFl6SVm7jn79JS+2SB1gf74j8K404bXI= Received: by 10.103.160.9 with SMTP id m9mr4220423muo.96.1228081778125; Sun, 30 Nov 2008 13:49:38 -0800 (PST) Received: from ?192.168.1.110? (catv-89-132-186-236.catv.broadband.hu [89.132.186.236]) by mx.google.com with ESMTPS id e8sm4389353muf.23.2008.11.30.13.49.36 (version=TLSv1/SSLv3 cipher=RC4-MD5); Sun, 30 Nov 2008 13:49:37 -0800 (PST) Message-ID: <49330A66.8040801@FreeBSD.org> Date: Sun, 30 Nov 2008 22:49:26 +0100 From: Gabor PALI Organization: The FreeBSD Project User-Agent: Thunderbird 2.0.0.17 (X11/20081023) MIME-Version: 1.0 To: Manolis Kiagias References: <493155ED.8020004@FreeBSD.org> <49316309.1050407@gmail.com> In-Reply-To: <49316309.1050407@gmail.com> X-Enigmail-Version: 0.95.7 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=UTF-8 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 8bit Sender: =?UTF-8?B?UMOBTEkgR8OhYm9yIErDoW5vcw==?= Cc: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook X-BeenThere: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.5 Precedence: list List-Id: Documentation project List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Sun, 30 Nov 2008 21:49:40 -0000 Manolis Kiagias wrote: > Here are a few nits you may want to act on. Thank you for your review. I fixed all the problems you pointed out and created a new version [1][2]. > I can't tell about technical accuracy. Hm, it seems I should really test the description myself :) > "Note that, a 320x200 “splash screen” image will be displayed as a > small block in the center of a solid white background screen." => I > don't understand what you mean by this. Since the resolution at boot > will be 320x200, the splash screen will still fill the entire screen. > Do you mean to compare the size of the image to a typical desktop? To be honest, it was (blindly) imported from the original text. As far as I remember (I used splash screens about three years ago), it wants to tell you something like "if you have a 320x200 image but the resolution is higher, then it will be put in the middle of the screen". Anyway, I removed this sentence, since I do not see any clear connection with the other sentences. > While discussing text mode screensavers, it might be worth mentioning > that you can get the list of available savers by ls > /boot/kernel/*saver.ko or something along that line. Instead of this, I simply referenced the splash(4) manual page, it should be enough. > I also feel some longer sentences could use a few commas. I tried to insert those commas, and split some longer sentences up into smaller ones. > I've only peeked at the SGML, but I am sure there is nothing to fix > there :) Thank you for trusting my SGML skills :) Note for native speakers: please, review! Regards, :g [1] http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/11/30/splash.screen.section.patch.diff [2] http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/11/30/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH