From owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Mon Nov 24 19:34:39 2008 Return-Path: Delivered-To: doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.freebsd.org (mx1.freebsd.org [IPv6:2001:4f8:fff6::34]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 76A151065675 for ; Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:34:39 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from sonic2000gr@gmail.com) Received: from ey-out-2122.google.com (ey-out-2122.google.com [74.125.78.25]) by mx1.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 067EB8FC12 for ; Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:34:38 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from sonic2000gr@gmail.com) Received: by ey-out-2122.google.com with SMTP id 6so872026eyi.7 for ; Mon, 24 Nov 2008 11:34:37 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=gamma; h=domainkey-signature:received:received:message-id:date:from :user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject:references:in-reply-to :content-type:content-transfer-encoding; bh=pC1Odi1cQr+U23VeVujfDYrVg70MefCm/ybnxKtM3d0=; b=Z9Dcr8vI/5EIsPhhg7KXo3q1MUHs+ryNzHTjch9qNoyI6valq72qT9uHy2lDc1udkj d9l+8AHjfEpQUJkIb5yrSDqGsSpVKWKBH2X9//QESKL5mCkbnnPL6ExTUt3HqC6BlckE Sz+FPDtL7J0O7nd0ZgOZ2fr216Gdahn9GpngE= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=gmail.com; s=gamma; h=message-id:date:from:user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject :references:in-reply-to:content-type:content-transfer-encoding; b=d5+x70GczP3A9v06Qs1O7NduIWBq0yyrQZQrz69NEHeM9fC16DpTwzSKD3s/4QmiWF P8HtsrKU284H1U/ppQWs+zR3aDjsjEE9TN20Wn/L1GDGKbGMqmg18OMvGfyphjE37FCd Cp1grEbMaSUcdPa98SHYKnCsKbbypXNFSXJ9g= Received: by 10.210.43.11 with SMTP id q11mr3940650ebq.51.1227555272740; Mon, 24 Nov 2008 11:34:32 -0800 (PST) Received: from atlantis.dyndns.org (athedsl-70133.home.otenet.gr [87.203.155.67]) by mx.google.com with ESMTPS id 23sm25037eya.57.2008.11.24.11.34.30 (version=TLSv1/SSLv3 cipher=RC4-MD5); Mon, 24 Nov 2008 11:34:31 -0800 (PST) Message-ID: <492B01C4.6090707@gmail.com> Date: Mon, 24 Nov 2008 21:34:28 +0200 From: Manolis Kiagias User-Agent: Thunderbird 2.0.0.17 (X11/20081011) MIME-Version: 1.0 To: Giorgos Keramidas References: <492AE607.4020208@gmail.com> <20081124135107.06a8af26.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> <87abbp3q5o.fsf@kobe.laptop> In-Reply-To: <87abbp3q5o.fsf@kobe.laptop> Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Cc: gabor@kovesdan.org, Tom Rhodes , doc@freebsd.org, pgj@freebsd.org Subject: Re: A patch for the 'geom' chapter X-BeenThere: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.5 Precedence: list List-Id: Documentation project List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:34:39 -0000 Giorgos Keramidas wrote: > On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 13:51:07 -0500, Tom Rhodes wrote: > >> On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:36:07 +0200 >> Manolis Kiagias wrote: >> >>> http://people.freebsd.org/~manolis/geom.txt >>> > > >> This looks pretty good actually. I would probably change the >> following: >> >> + >> + Labeling Your Boot Disk's Partitions >> >> to: >> >> Labeling Partitions on the Boot Disk >> >> And there are a lot of "You" references. I've tried to write this >> without invoking the user as much as possible and may make reading the >> entire chapter difficult. I would prefer we not talk to the user >> though. >> > > I am not sure if I will have the time to read the full patch tonight, > but Tom is quite right about avoiding "you" when possible. > > Thanks. I will try to rephrase most parts into passive voice where possible. I guess I am somewhat influenced by the Greek translations, where sometimes passive voice sounds unnatural ;) Cheers, manolis