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Date:      Thu, 15 Jun 2000 11:22:48 -0400 (EDT)
From:      Daniel Harris <dannyboy@dannyboy.eyep.net>
To:        FreeBSD-gnats-submit@freebsd.org
Subject:   docs/19302: Nits, handbook chapter 2
Message-ID:  <200006151522.LAA04695@dannyboy.eyep.net>

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>Number:         19302
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       Nits, handbook chapter 2
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          open
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Thu Jun 15 08:30:00 PDT 2000
>Closed-Date:
>Last-Modified:
>Originator:     Daniel Harris
>Release:        FreeBSD 4.0-STABLE i386
>Organization:
no
>Environment:

	

>Description:

	Come, on, read the diff yourself.  A few install/installation nits;
	the rest are just tyops and think-os.

>How-To-Repeat:

	

>Fix:

	

--- /usr/doc/en_US.ISO_8859-1/books/handbook/install/chapter.sgml	Wed Jun 14 00:40:05 2000
+++ chapter.sgml	Thu Jun 15 11:09:38 2000
@@ -14,15 +14,15 @@
     <title>Synopsis</title>
 
     <para>The following chapter will attempt to guide you through the
-      install of FreeBSD on your system.  It can be installed through a
+      installation of FreeBSD on your system.  It can be installed through a
       variety of methods, including anonymous FTP (assuming you have
       network connectivity via modem or local network), CDROM, floppy
       disk, tape, an MS-DOS partition, or even NFS.</para>
 
     <para>No matter which method you choose, you will need to get started
       by creating the <emphasis>installation disks</emphasis> as described
-      in the <link linkend="install-floppies">next section</link>.  By
-      booting into the FreeBSD installer, even if you are not planning on
+      in the <link linkend="install-floppies">next section</link>.
+      Booting into the FreeBSD installer, even if you are not planning on
       installing FreeBSD right away, will provide important information
       about compatibility with your hardware.  This information may
       dictate which installation options are even possible for you.  It
@@ -32,7 +32,7 @@
     <para>If you plan to install FreeBSD via anonymous FTP, the only
       things you will need are the <link
       linkend="install-floppies">installation floppies</link>.  The
-      install program itself will handle anything else that is
+      installation program itself will handle anything else that is
       required.</para>
 
     <para>For more information about obtaining FreeBSD, see the <link
@@ -54,10 +54,10 @@
       <title>Preparing for the Installation</title>
 
       <para>There are various things you should do in preparation for the
-        install.  The following describes what needs to be done prior to
+        installation.  The following describes what needs to be done prior to
 	each type of installation.</para>
 
-      <para>The first thing you should do is make sure your hardware is
+      <para>The first thing to do is to make sure your hardware is
 	supported by FreeBSD.  The list of <link
 	linkend="install-hw">supported hardware</link> should
 	come in handy here. ;-)  It would also be a good idea to make a
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@
 	  installation boot disks from the image files, do the
 	  following:</para>
 
-	<para>The first thing you will need to do is download the image
+	<para>Download the image
 	  files.  These can be retrieved from the <ulink
 	  url="ftp://ftp.FreeBSD.org/pub/FreeBSD/releases/i386/&rel.current;-RELEASE/floppies/">floppies directory</ulink>
 	  of the FreeBSD FTP site or your local mirror.</para>
@@ -140,8 +140,8 @@
 	<para>If the CD has El Torito boot support and your system
 	  supports booting directly from the CDROM drive (many older
 	  systems do <emphasis>NOT</emphasis>), simply insert the first
-	  FreeBSD of the set into the drive and reboot your system.  You
-	  will be put into the install menu directly from the CD.</para>
+	  CD of the set into the drive and reboot your system.  You
+	  will be put into the installation menu directly from the CD.</para>
 
 	<para>If you are installing from an MS-DOS partition and have
 	  the proper drivers to access your CD, run the
@@ -184,7 +184,7 @@
 	  <para>Before invoking the installation, be sure that the CDROM
 	    is in the drive so that the install probe can find it.  This
 	    is also true if you wish the CDROM to be added to the default
-	    system configuration automatically during the install (whether
+	    system configuration automatically during the installation (whether
 	    or not you actually use it as the installation media).</para>
 	</note>
 
@@ -205,7 +205,7 @@
 
 	 <note><para>If you choose to enable anonymous FTP during the
 	 installation of your system, the installation program will do
-	 the above procedure for you.</para></note>
+	 the above for you.</para></note>
 
       </sect3>
 
@@ -215,7 +215,7 @@
 	<para>If you must install from floppy disk (which we suggest you
 	  do <emphasis>NOT</emphasis> do), either due to unsupported
 	  hardware or simply because you insist on doing things the hard
-	  way, you must first prepare some floppies for the install.</para>
+	  way, you must first prepare some floppies for the installation.</para>
 
 	<para>At a minimum, you will need as many 1.44MB or 1.2MB floppies
 	  as it takes to hold all the files in the
@@ -238,7 +238,7 @@
 	  <command>disklabel</command> and <command>newfs</command>
 	  commands to put a UFS filesystem on them instead, as the
 	  following sequence of commands (for a 3.5" 1.44MB floppy)
-	  illustrate:</para>
+	  illustrates:</para>
 
 	<screen>&prompt.root; <userinput>fdformat -f 1440 fd0.1440</userinput>
 &prompt.root; <userinput>disklabel -w -r fd0.1440 floppy3</userinput>
@@ -448,7 +448,7 @@
 
 	  <screen><userinput>ftp://209.55.82.20/pub/FreeBSD/&rel.current;-RELEASE</userinput></screen>;
 
-	  <para>There are two FTP installation modes you can choose from,
+	  <para>There are two FTP installation modes you can choose from:
 	    active or passive FTP.</para>
 
 	  <variablelist>
@@ -524,8 +524,8 @@
       <para>Once you have completed the pre-installation step relevant to
         your situation, you are ready to install FreeBSD!</para>
 
-      <para>Although you should not experience any difficulties, there is
-        always the chance you might, no matter how slight it is.  If this
+      <para>Although you should not experience any difficulty, there is
+        always the chance that you may, no matter how slight it is.  If this
 	is the case in your situation, then you may wish to go back and
 	re-read the relevant preparation section or sections.  Perhaps you
 	will come across something you missed the first time.  If you are
@@ -805,7 +805,7 @@
 	</listitem>
       </itemizedlist>
 
-      <para>Unmaintained drivers, they might or might not work for your
+      <para>Unmaintained drivers, which might or might not work for your
         hardware:</para>
 
       <itemizedlist>

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