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Subject: Re: svn commit: r318468 - in stable/11/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1:
 hardware readme
From: Adam Weinberger <adamw@adamw.org>
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> On 18 May, 2017, at 10:24, Glen Barber <gjb@FreeBSD.org> wrote:
>=20
> Author: gjb
> Date: Thu May 18 16:24:11 2017
> New Revision: 318468
> URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/base/318468
>=20
> Log:
>  Fix grammar nits.
>=20
>  Sponsored by:	The FreeBSD Foundation
>=20
> Modified:
>  stable/11/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/hardware/article.xml
>  stable/11/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/readme/article.xml
>=20
> Modified: stable/11/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/hardware/article.xml
> =
=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=3D=
=3D=3D=3D
> --- stable/11/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/hardware/article.xml	=
Thu May 18 16:24:10 2017	(r318467)
> +++ stable/11/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/hardware/article.xml	=
Thu May 18 16:24:11 2017	(r318468)
> @@ -555,7 +555,7 @@
>       </itemizedlist>
>=20
>       <para>The following Sun &ultrasparc; systems are not tested but
> -	believed to be also supported by &os;:</para>
> +	believed to also be supported by &os;:</para>

As long as we're picking grammar nits, you've split an infinitive there. =
I think you want "believed also to be supported" or "believed to be =
supported by &os; as well:".

>=20
>       <itemizedlist>
> 	<listitem>
> @@ -581,7 +581,7 @@
>       </itemizedlist>
>=20
>       <para>The following Fujitsu &primepower; systems are not tested
> -	but believed to be also supported by &os;:</para>
> +	but believed to also be supported by &os;:</para>

Same here.

# Adam


--=20
Adam Weinberger
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