Date: Thu, 7 May 1998 15:00:03 -0700 (PDT) From: Doug White <dwhite@gdi.uoregon.edu> To: freebsd-bugs@FreeBSD.ORG Subject: Re: misc/6537: New improved motd, take 2 Message-ID: <199805072200.PAA12953@freefall.freebsd.org>
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The following reply was made to PR misc/6537; it has been noted by GNATS. From: Doug White <dwhite@gdi.uoregon.edu> To: Studded <Studded@san.rr.com> Cc: freebsd-gnats-submit@FreeBSD.ORG Subject: Re: misc/6537: New improved motd, take 2 Date: Thu, 7 May 1998 14:54:36 -0700 (PDT) On Thu, 7 May 1998, Studded wrote: Thanks for kicking this around, however my grammar-teacher instinct wants to bash this a bit ... > Please see the Releases page at http://www.FreeBSD.ORG/releases/ for > any security advisories or updated information regarding this release. This doesn't quite flow right, and it implies a one-or-the-other feeling. How about replacing `or' with `and': Please see the Releases page at http://www.FreeBSD.ORG/releases/ for any security advisories and updated information regarding this release. Or try this simplification: Please see the Releases page at http://www.FreeBSD.ORG/releases/ for updated information regarding this release. Is this too generic if I s/updated/important/?: Please see the Releases page at http://www.FreeBSD.ORG/releases/ for important information regarding this release. Am I spending too much time on this? :-) > If you require technical assistance: > 1. Please consult the releases page mentioned above. ^^^^^^ I think Please is a little redundant here. Just 1. Consult the Errata section of the Releases page mentioned above. should be sufficient. We're offering a list of suggestions, not imploring the user to do something, like we are at the top since we would really like them to check this page first-thing out-of-the-box. The change to #2 is fine. I assume everyone is okay with dropping the sysinstall bit. Doug White | University of Oregon Internet: dwhite@resnet.uoregon.edu | Residence Networking Assistant http://gladstone.uoregon.edu/~dwhite | Computer Science Major To Unsubscribe: send mail to majordomo@FreeBSD.org with "unsubscribe freebsd-bugs" in the body of the message
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