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On Sun, 2009-08-30 at 16:39 +0200, Daniel Gerzo wrote:
> Hello guys,
> 
> I am seeking for documentation, language and grammar review for a new 
> article describing steps required to use custom gcc from ports. The 
> article has been written by mm@ and I have just sgml-fied it. As both 
> Martin and me are not native english speakers, I would like someone to 
> review it before I do the commit. It has gone through a quick review 
> already, but an additional work may be still required.
> 
> The diff is available at:
> http://people.freebsd.org/~danger/custom-gcc.diff
> 
> Built version is available at:
> http://people.freebsd.org/~danger/gcc.html
> 
> Thanks,

s/prerequisities/prerequisites/

s/folowing/following/

s/comparision/comparison/

The grammar is fine for the "conversational" style that the document is
written in. Comma usage is perhaps slightly excessive and some of the
text could be tidied up but the instructions seem to be clear enough.


Wayne