From owner-svn-doc-all@FreeBSD.ORG Sun Oct 13 14:47:39 2013 Return-Path: Delivered-To: svn-doc-all@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.freebsd.org (mx1.freebsd.org [8.8.178.115]) (using TLSv1 with cipher ADH-AES256-SHA (256/256 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id BE084492; Sun, 13 Oct 2013 14:47:39 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from wblock@wonkity.com) Received: from wonkity.com (wonkity.com [67.158.26.137]) (using TLSv1 with cipher DHE-RSA-AES256-SHA (256/256 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by mx1.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 580F12669; Sun, 13 Oct 2013 14:47:39 +0000 (UTC) Received: from wonkity.com (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by wonkity.com (8.14.7/8.14.7) with ESMTP id r9DElVPH078158; Sun, 13 Oct 2013 08:47:31 -0600 (MDT) (envelope-from wblock@wonkity.com) Received: from localhost (wblock@localhost) by wonkity.com (8.14.7/8.14.7/Submit) with ESMTP id r9DElVQv078155; Sun, 13 Oct 2013 08:47:31 -0600 (MDT) (envelope-from wblock@wonkity.com) Date: Sun, 13 Oct 2013 08:47:31 -0600 (MDT) From: Warren Block To: Gavin Atkinson Subject: Re: svn commit: r42948 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers In-Reply-To: <201310131144.r9DBiIOI015785@svn.freebsd.org> Message-ID: References: <201310131144.r9DBiIOI015785@svn.freebsd.org> User-Agent: Alpine 2.00 (BSF 1167 2008-08-23) MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: TEXT/PLAIN; charset=US-ASCII; format=flowed X-Greylist: Sender IP whitelisted, not delayed by milter-greylist-4.4.3 (wonkity.com [127.0.0.1]); Sun, 13 Oct 2013 08:47:31 -0600 (MDT) Cc: svn-doc-head@freebsd.org, svn-doc-all@freebsd.org, doc-committers@freebsd.org X-BeenThere: svn-doc-all@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.14 Precedence: list List-Id: "SVN commit messages for the entire doc trees \(except for " user" , " projects" , and " translations" \)" List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Sun, 13 Oct 2013 14:47:39 -0000 On Sun, 13 Oct 2013, Gavin Atkinson wrote: > Author: gavin > Date: Sun Oct 13 11:44:18 2013 > New Revision: 42948 > URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/42948 > > Log: > Replace UTF-8 'RIGHT SINGLE QUOTATION MARK' (U+2019), encoded as > 0xE2 0x80 0x99, with a standard apostrophe. It's not clear to me why > this was brealing the build on the cluster and seemingly nowhere else, but > this should at least allow the build there to complete. > > Modified: > head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml > > Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml > ============================================================================== > --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml Sun Oct 13 03:19:30 2013 (r42947) > +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-servers/chapter.xml Sun Oct 13 11:44:18 2013 (r42948) > @@ -6264,7 +6264,7 @@ target iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0 { > allowed. > > Second entry defines a single target. Target has two > - meanings - it is a machine serving iSCSI, but it?s also > + meanings - it is a machine serving iSCSI, but it's also > a named group of LUNs. In this example, we use the latter > meaning. The "iqn.2012-06.com.example:target0" is the > target name. For testing purposes it might be left as it Contractions are a style guide problem anyway. "it's" should be expanded or even removed. Other notes: "Second entry defines a single target." is missing an article, or possibly better rearranged as "A single target is defined by the second entry." The word "target" in the second sentence could use or tags to point out that it is talking about the use of the word in the first sentence.