From owner-freebsd-doc Wed Dec 25 7:30:25 2002 Delivered-To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.FreeBSD.org (mx1.freebsd.org [216.136.204.125]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 6DECE37B401; Wed, 25 Dec 2002 07:30:24 -0800 (PST) Received: from wonkity.com (wonkity.com [63.93.4.4]) by mx1.FreeBSD.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id AA91543E4A; Wed, 25 Dec 2002 07:30:23 -0800 (PST) (envelope-from wblock@wonkity.com) Received: from wonkity.com (localhost.wonkity.com [127.0.0.1]) by wonkity.com (8.12.1/8.11.6) with ESMTP id gBPFUKuF078014; Wed, 25 Dec 2002 08:30:20 -0700 (MST) (envelope-from wblock@wonkity.com) Received: from localhost (wblock@localhost) by wonkity.com (8.12.1/8.12.1/Submit) with ESMTP id gBPFUKOw078011; Wed, 25 Dec 2002 08:30:20 -0700 (MST)?g (envelope-from wblock@wonkity.com) Date: Wed, 25 Dec 2002 08:30:20 -0700 (MST) From: Warren Block To: Mario Sergio Fujikawa Ferreira Cc: Ceri Davies , Tom Hukins , steve@FreeBSD.ORG, "Gary W. Swearingen" , FreeBSD-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Subject: Re: Review change on committer's handbook In-Reply-To: <20021224180948.4521.qmail@exxodus.fedaykin.here> Message-ID: MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: TEXT/PLAIN; charset=US-ASCII Sender: owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Precedence: bulk List-ID: List-Archive: (Web Archive) List-Help: (List Instructions) List-Subscribe: List-Unsubscribe: X-Loop: FreeBSD.org On Tue, 24 Dec 2002, Mario Sergio Fujikawa Ferreira wrote: > "First, send mail to &a.portmgr; with the repo copy request listing > the reasons for it. Next, if &a.portmgr; approves it, &a.cvs; will > do a repository copy from the old location/name to the new > location/name. You will then receive a notice, at which point you > are expected to perform the following:" Hmm. I'd suggest: "Email &a.portmgr; listing the reasons for this repo copy request. If &a.portmgr; approves the request, &a.cvs; will repository copy the port to the new location and name. When you receive email notification of the repo copy, you are expected to perform these steps:" Notes: Rewritten to avoid the use of "it", which readers often find confusing. Changed "Send mail" to "Email". Added quotes to the first "repo copy", since it's a term. might be more appropriate, dunno. Added emphasis around "repository copy". Eliminated redundant old/new location. Rewrote last two sentences, although I think they could be better yet. Changed "perform the following" to "perform these steps". It seems better not to refer to a procedure by its location. -Warren Block * Rapid City, South Dakota USA To Unsubscribe: send mail to majordomo@FreeBSD.org with "unsubscribe freebsd-doc" in the body of the message