Date: Thu, 14 Mar 2002 13:34:08 -0800 From: bmah@freebsd.org (Bruce A. Mah) To: Udo Erdelhoff <ue@nathan.ruhr.de> Cc: "Bruce A. Mah" <bmah@freebsd.org>, freebsd-sparc@freebsd.org, freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: FreeBSD/sparc64 install document active in -CURRENT Message-ID: <200203142134.g2ELY8O23997@bmah.dyndns.org> In-Reply-To: <20020314185648.GO90154@nathan.ruhr.de> References: <200203140543.g2E5hek56478@bmah.dyndns.org> <20020314185648.GO90154@nathan.ruhr.de>
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If memory serves me right, Udo Erdelhoff wrote:
Good job...I can't believe I left off so many closing tags (admittedly
I wasn't looking for them). Two minor things...
> @@ -139,12 +139,10 @@
> on the keyboard, or send a
> <command>BREAK</command> over the serial console (using for
> example <command>~#</command> in &man.tip.1; or &man.cu.1;) to
> - get to the PROM prompt. It looks like
> + get to the PROM prompt. It looks like this:</para>
>
> - <screen>ok </screen>
> - or
> - <screen>ok {0} </screen>
> - (on SMP systems).</para>
> + <screen><prompt>ok </prompt> (systems with one CPU)
> +<prompt>ok {0} </prompt> (SMP systems)</screen>
Can we get "(systems with one CPU)" and "(SMP systems)" outside the
<screen></screen> element? They're explanatory text, not literal stuff
that shows up on the screen. Not sure if there's an easy way to do
this.
> @@ -242,7 +240,7 @@
> :rp="<replaceable>tftp-server-ip-address</replaceable>:<replaceable>nfs-ro
> ot-directory</replaceable>":\
> :sm=<replaceable>ip-netmask</replaceable>
>
> -<name of the entry>:\
> +<replaceable>name of the entry</replaceable>:\
> ha=<replaceable>sparc64-ethernet-address</replaceable>:ip=<replaceable>spa
> rc64-ip-address</replaceable>:tc=.default</programlisting>
I went through a little bit of work to make sure all of the multi-word
replaceables had hyphens separating the words. "name of entry" should
probably be "name-of-entry" to be consistent with this.
Other than these, I have no changes to suggest.
Thanks!
Bruce.
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