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Date:      Mon, 18 Apr 2016 03:06:36 +0000 (UTC)
From:      Warren Block <wblock@FreeBSD.org>
To:        doc-committers@freebsd.org, svn-doc-all@freebsd.org, svn-doc-head@freebsd.org
Subject:   svn commit: r48662 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status
Message-ID:  <201604180306.u3I36aZp079146@repo.freebsd.org>

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Author: wblock
Date: Mon Apr 18 03:06:35 2016
New Revision: 48662
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/48662

Log:
  Editing pass to reduce redundancy and improve readability.

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2016-01-2016-03.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2016-01-2016-03.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2016-01-2016-03.xml	Sun Apr 17 21:45:16 2016	(r48661)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2016-01-2016-03.xml	Mon Apr 18 03:06:35 2016	(r48662)
@@ -2313,6 +2313,7 @@
     </contact>
 
     <links>
+      <url href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/">FreeBSD Foundation Site</url>
       <url href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/donors/">Donors</url>;
       <url href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/what-we-do/education-advocacy/">Education and Advocacy Materials</url>
       <url href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/blog/faces-of-freebsd-2016-scott-long/">Faces of FreeBSD: Scott Long</url>
@@ -2345,15 +2346,16 @@
 
       <p>We raised $204,000 last quarter from individual and corporate
 	donors.  Thank you to everyone who made a donation this year!
-	The list of donors is available here:
-	<a href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/donors/">https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/donors/</a>.</p>;
+	The
+	<a href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/donors/">list of donors</a>
+	is available.</p>
 
       <p>OS Improvements</p>
 
-      <p>The Foundation supports software development to improve
-	FreeBSD by funding projects approved through our proposal
+      <p>The Foundation improves
+	FreeBSD by funding software development projects approved through our proposal
 	submission process and our three software developer staff
-	members.  Two Foundation funded projects were started last
+	members.  Two Foundation-funded projects were started last
 	quarter, the first to improve stability of the vnet network
 	stack virtualization infrastructure, and the second for phase
 	two of the FreeBSD/arm64 port project.</p>
@@ -2373,17 +2375,17 @@
       <p>Foundation employee and release engineer Glen Barber worked
 	on packaging the base system with <tt>pkg(8)</tt>, separating
 	debug files from the default base system so they can be
-	selected/deselected during installation time, supporting
+	selected or deselected during an install, supporting
 	preparations, testing for the on-time release of FreeBSD
 	10.3, and producing 11-CURRENT and 10-STABLE snapshot
 	builds.</p>
 
       <p>FreeBSD Advocacy</p>
 
-      <p>Our Marketing Director, Anne Dickison, focused on creating
+      <p>Anne Dickison, our Marketing Director, focused on creating
 	and updating marketing material to promote and teach people
-	about FreeBSD.  This material
-	<a href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/what-we-do/education-advocacy/">is available</a>
+	about FreeBSD.
+	<a href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/what-we-do/education-advocacy/">This material is available</a>
 	for FreeBSD advocates to hand out at conferences and events to
 	promote FreeBSD.  She also worked on promoting FreeBSD work
 	being done over social media, blog posts, and articles.</p>
@@ -2394,10 +2396,10 @@
 	and
 	<a href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/blog/faces-of-freebsd-2016-sean-bruno/">Sean Bruno</a>.
 	This is an opportunity to put a face to a name in the FreeBSD
-	community, and get to know more about the people who
+	community and get to know more about the people who
 	contribute to FreeBSD.</p>
 
-      <p>We started working on updating the FreeBSD 10.X brochure to
+      <p>Work began on updating the FreeBSD 10.X brochure to
 	include the new 10.3 features.</p>
 
       <p>We love getting stories from companies who are successfully
@@ -2411,22 +2413,22 @@
 	<a href="https://www.freebsdfoundation.org/blog/initial-freebsd-risc-v-architecture-port-committed/">the FreeBSD RISC-V</a>
 	work being done.</p>
 
-      <p>We assisted Mellanox with their press release highlighting
+      <p>Assistance was provided to Mellanox for their press release highlighting
 	<a href="http://www.mellanox.com/page/press_release_item?id=1688">their work with NetFlix</a>.</p>
 
       <p>Conferences and Events</p>
 
-      <p>We sponsor many conferences, events, and summits around the
-	globe.  They may be BSD-related, open source, or technology
+      <p>The FreeBSD Foundation sponsors many conferences, events, and summits around the
+	globe.  These events can be BSD-related, open source, or technology
 	events geared towards underrepresented groups.  We provide
 	financial support to the major BSD conferences like BSDCan,
 	AsiaBSDCon, and EuroBSDCon, and give financial and/or other
 	support for smaller events like BSDDays, FreeBSD Summits, and
-	FreeBSD workshops/camps/hackathons.  For open source
-	conferences we will attend when we can get a free non-profit
+	FreeBSD workshops, camps, and hackathons.  For open source
+	conferences, we will attend when we can get a free non-profit
 	booth.</p>
 
-      <p>We kicked off the year by sending Ed Maste, Benedict
+      <p>The year kicked off with sending Ed Maste, Benedict
 	Reuschling, and George Neville-Neil to promote and give talks
 	on FreeBSD at FOSDEM, the largest open source conference in
 	Europe.  Ed, our Project Development Director, had a chance to
@@ -2434,26 +2436,26 @@
 	various people about reproducible builds in FreeBSD.</p>
 
       <p>Dru Lavigne and Deb Goodkin promoted FreeBSD at SCALE in
-	Pasadena, CA and Dru gave a presentation called “Doc Like an
-	Egyptian.” We were a Gold Sponsor for AsiaBSDCon, and had five
-	Foundation members attend.  Kirk McKusick taught a 2-day
-	FreeBSD Kernel tutorial and gave a 1-hour talk on the history
+	Pasadena, California.  Dru gave a presentation called "Doc Like an
+	Egyptian." We were a Gold Sponsor for AsiaBSDCon in Tokyo, and five
+	Foundation members attended.  Kirk McKusick taught a two-day
+	FreeBSD Kernel tutorial and gave a talk on the history
 	of the BSD filesystem. Dru Lavigne and Benedict Reuschling
 	gave a documentation tutorial. Board members Hiroki Sato and
 	George Neville-Neil helped organize the conference.  BSDnow.tv
 	interviewed Benedict at AsiaBSDCon about his role as a new
-	Foundation board member and the work the Foundation does.</p>
+	Foundation board member and the Foundation's work.</p>
 
-      <p>We planned and organized our first ever FreeBSD Storage
-	Summit, which was in association with the USENIX FAST
+      <p>We planned and organized our first-ever FreeBSD Storage
+	Summit in association with the USENIX FAST
 	Conference.  Led by our President and Founder, Justin Gibbs,
 	we had over 50 attendees participating and working together on
-	technically focussed topics.  Benedict was busy promoting
-	FreeBSD in Europe, because he also attended Linuxtage in
-	Chemnitz, Germany, and gave a talk on FreeBSD (in German):
+	technically focused topics.  Benedict was busy promoting
+	FreeBSD in Europe, where he also attended Linuxtage in
+	Chemnitz, Germany to give a talk on FreeBSD (in German):
 	<a href="https://chemnitzer.linux-tage.de/2016/de/programm/beitrag/194">FreeBSD – The Power to Serve a Community</a>.</p>
 
-      <p>We committed to being a Gold Sponsor for BSDCan and the
+      <p>The Foundation committed to being a Gold Sponsor for BSDCan and the
 	upcoming Hackathon/DevSummit in Essen, Germany in April.</p>
 
       <p>Legal/FreeBSD IP</p>
@@ -2465,7 +2467,7 @@
       <p>FreeBSD Community Engagement</p>
 
       <p>Code of Conduct - Anne Dickison, our Marketing Director, has
-	been overseeing the efforts to rewrite the Project’s Code of
+	been overseeing the efforts to rewrite the Project's Code of
 	Conduct to help make this a safe, inclusive, and welcoming
 	community.</p>
 
@@ -2479,14 +2481,14 @@
 	can recruit more women to FreeBSD and offer Intro to FreeBSD
 	workshops.</p>
 
-      <p>We met with a number of commercial vendors to help facilitate
+      <p>Meetings were held with a number of commercial vendors to help facilitate
 	collaboration with the Project. This included presenting how
 	the Project is organized, and how companies can get help,
 	contribute back to the Project, promote their use of FreeBSD,
 	and for us to get their feedback on the work we are doing to
 	help with our fundraising efforts.</p>
 
-      <p>We launched our new website and logo, signaling the ongoing
+      <p>The new Foundation website and logo was launched, signaling the ongoing
 	evolution of the Foundation identity and ability to better
 	serve the FreeBSD Project and community.  Find our more about
 	our



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