From owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Thu May 27 19:15:53 2004 Return-Path: Delivered-To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.FreeBSD.org (mx1.freebsd.org [216.136.204.125]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 28B9A16A4CE for ; Thu, 27 May 2004 19:15:53 -0700 (PDT) Received: from terpsi.otenet.gr (terpsi.otenet.gr [195.170.0.9]) by mx1.FreeBSD.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 650DF43D2F for ; Thu, 27 May 2004 19:15:52 -0700 (PDT) (envelope-from keramida@ceid.upatras.gr) Received: from gothmog.gr (patr530-b162.otenet.gr [212.205.244.170]) by terpsi.otenet.gr (8.12.10/8.12.10) with ESMTP id i4S2Expf019807 for ; Fri, 28 May 2004 05:15:04 +0300 (EEST) Received: from gothmog.gr (gothmog [127.0.0.1]) by gothmog.gr (8.12.11/8.12.11) with ESMTP id i4RI4Zb7022486 for ; Thu, 27 May 2004 21:04:35 +0300 (EEST) (envelope-from keramida@ceid.upatras.gr) Received: (from giorgos@localhost) by gothmog.gr (8.12.11/8.12.11/Submit) id i4RI4ZVw022485; Thu, 27 May 2004 21:04:35 +0300 (EEST) (envelope-from keramida@ceid.upatras.gr) Date: Thu, 27 May 2004 21:04:35 +0300 From: Giorgos Keramidas To: Maxim Konovalov Message-ID: <20040527180435.GB2755@gothmog.gr> References: <20040526104834.Y64547@mp3files.int.ru> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Disposition: inline In-Reply-To: <20040526104834.Y64547@mp3files.int.ru> cc: docs@freebsd.org Subject: Re: isp.xml diff for review X-BeenThere: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.1 Precedence: list List-Id: Documentation project List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Fri, 28 May 2004 02:15:53 -0000 On 2004-05-26 10:50, Maxim Konovalov wrote: > Hello, > > Could you please review an enclosed diff especially my English. > TIA. > > Index: isp.xml > =================================================================== > RCS file: /home/ncvs/www/en/commercial/isp.xml,v > retrieving revision 1.7 > diff -u -r1.7 isp.xml > --- isp.xml 21 May 2004 17:46:21 -0000 1.7 > +++ isp.xml 26 May 2004 06:47:46 -0000 > @@ -85,4 +85,22 @@ > programming as well as consulting and training. > > > + > + > + MAcomnet telecommunications company, Moscow, Russia > + http://www.macomnet.com/ > + > + CJSC MAcomnet is one of the biggest Moscow telecommunication > + companies founded in 1991 by the Moscow Metropoliten and > + Andrew Corporation (USA). Numerous customers do justice to > + MAcomnet service high quality and level, among them are large > + communications operators, Internet providers, telephone companies, > + banks, hotels, exhibition centers, embassies, well known trading > + companies, government organizations, institutions, industrial > + enterprises, scientific-research institutes, mass media. > + A lot of MAcomnet ISP servers are FreeBSD based. MAcomnet > + hosts cvsup4.ru.FreeBSD.org and cvsup5.ru.FreeBSD.org cvsup > + mirrors. > + > + > > %%% The English is fine; well, except for one minor detail anyway. You should probably split the original text's largest sentence in the following two separate sentences: > + Andrew Corporation (USA). Numerous customers do justice to > + MAcomnet service high quality and level. Among them are large > + communications operators, Internet providers, telephone companies, > + banks, hotels, exhibition centers, embassies, well known trading > + companies, government organizations, institutions, industrial > + enterprises, scientific-research institutes, mass media. or something similar. "Among MAcomnet's customers are large..." sounds fine to me too. - Giorgos