Date: Mon, 26 May 2014 17:10:55 +0000 (UTC) From: Benedict Reuschling <bcr@FreeBSD.org> To: doc-committers@freebsd.org, svn-doc-all@freebsd.org, svn-doc-head@freebsd.org Subject: svn commit: r44960 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install Message-ID: <201405261710.s4QHAtNJ059875@svn.freebsd.org>
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Author: bcr Date: Mon May 26 17:10:55 2014 New Revision: 44960 URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/44960 Log: Remove contractions, improve capitalization, clean up redundant markup and words. Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml ============================================================================== --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml Mon May 26 16:34:04 2014 (r44959) +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/remote-install/article.xml Mon May 26 17:10:55 2014 (r44960) @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ <!DOCTYPE article PUBLIC "-//FreeBSD//DTD DocBook XML V5.0-Based Extension//EN" "http://www.FreeBSD.org/XML/share/xml/freebsd50.dtd">; <article xmlns="http://docbook.org/ns/docbook" xmlns:xlink="http://www.w3.org/1999/xlink" version="5.0" xml:lang="en"> - <info><title>Remote Installation of the &os; Operating System without a + <info><title>Remote Installation of the &os; Operating System Without a Remote Console</title> @@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ <para>In some cases, these companies will install your preferred &linux; distribution if you request it. Using this option, we will attempt to install &os;. In other cases, they may offer a rescue - system which would be used in an emergency. It's possible to use + system which would be used in an emergency. It is possible to use this for our purposes as well.</para> <para>This article covers the basic installation and configuration @@ -166,7 +166,7 @@ <para>Another important thing to set is the <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem> password. This can be done by editing - the <filename>conf/rootpw.conf</filename> file. Please keep in + <filename>conf/rootpw.conf</filename>. Please keep in mind that the file will contain your password in the plain text, thus we do not recommend to use real password here. Nevertheless, this is just a temporary one-time password which @@ -189,17 +189,16 @@ initconf_ip_ext1="192.168.0.2" initconf_netmask_ext1="255.255.255.0"</programlisting> <para>Do not forget to add the <literal>defaultrouter</literal> - information to the <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> - file:</para> + information to <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename>:</para> <programlisting>defaultrouter="192.168.0.1"</programlisting> </sect3> <sect3> - <title>The <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> method</title> + <title>The <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> Method</title> <para>When the network interface driver is known, it is more - convenient to use the <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> file + convenient to use <filename>conf/rc.conf</filename> for networking options. The syntax of this file is the same as the one used in the standard &man.rc.conf.5; file of &os;.</para> @@ -214,7 +213,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 </sect2> <sect2 xml:id="mfsbsd-build"> - <title>Building an <application>mfsBSD</application> image</title> + <title>Building an <application>mfsBSD</application> Image</title> <para>The process of building an <application>mfsBSD</application> image is pretty straightforward.</para> @@ -236,9 +235,9 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 <screen>&prompt.root; <userinput>make BASE=/cdrom/<replaceable>7.0-RELEASE</replaceable></userinput></screen> <note> - <para>The above <command>make</command> command has to be run + <para>The above <command>make</command> has to be run from the top level of the <application>mfsBSD</application> - directory tree, i.e. <filename>~/mfsbsd-1.0-beta1/</filename>.</para> + directory tree, for example <filename>~/mfsbsd-1.0-beta1/</filename>.</para> </note> </sect2> @@ -271,7 +270,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 </sect1> <sect1 xml:id="installation"> - <title>Installation of The &os; Operating System</title> + <title>Installation of the &os; Operating System</title> <para>The <application>mfsBSD</application> has been successfully booted and it should be possible to log in through &man.ssh.1;. @@ -307,7 +306,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 introduction, this article will present how to set up a system with RAID-1 and <application>ZFS</application> capabilities. Our set up will consist of a small &man.gmirror.8; mirrored - <filename>/</filename> (root), <filename>/usr</filename> and <filename>/var</filename> file systems, and the rest of + <filename>/</filename> (root), <filename>/usr</filename> and <filename>/var</filename> dataset, and the rest of the disk space will be allocated for a &man.zpool.8; mirrored <application>ZFS</application> file system. Please note, that the <application>ZFS</application> file system will be @@ -369,7 +368,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 </callout> <callout arearefs="gmirror2"> - <para>Note the <option>-F</option> option used for swap + <para>Note that <option>-F</option> is used for the swap partition. This instructs &man.gmirror.8; to assume that the device is in the consistent state after the power/system failure.</para> @@ -414,13 +413,13 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 </warning> <para>Go to the <guimenuitem>Distributions</guimenuitem> menu, - move the cursor with the arrow keys on the - <option>Minimal</option> option, and check it by pressing + move the cursor with the arrow keys to + <option>Minimal</option>, and check it by pressing <keycap>Space</keycap>. This article uses the Minimal distribution in order to save network traffic, because the system itself will be installed over <application>ftp</application>. Exit this menu by choosing - <option>Exit</option> option.</para> + <option>Exit</option>.</para> <note> <para>The <guimenuitem>Partition</guimenuitem> and @@ -470,9 +469,9 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 <filename>/etc/resolv.conf</filename> and <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> files. Do not forget to properly set the network information and to enable - <application>sshd</application> in the - <filename>/etc/rc.conf</filename> file. The contents of the - <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> file will be similar to the + <application>sshd</application> in + <filename>/etc/rc.conf</filename>. The contents of + <filename>/etc/fstab</filename> will be similar to the following:</para> <programlisting># Device Mountpoint FStype Options Dump Pass# @@ -484,7 +483,7 @@ ifconfig_re0="inet 192.168.0.2 netmask 2 </listitem> <listitem> - <para>Create the <filename>/boot/loader.conf</filename> file, + <para>Create <filename>/boot/loader.conf</filename> with the following contents:</para> <programlisting>geom_mirror_load="YES" @@ -539,7 +538,7 @@ zfs_load="YES"</programlisting> &prompt.root; <userinput>zfs set mountpoint=/usr/ports tank/ports</userinput> &prompt.root; <userinput>zfs set mountpoint=/usr/src tank/src</userinput></screen> - <para>That's all. If you are interested in more details about + <para>That is all. If you are interested in more details about <application>ZFS</application> on &os;, please refer to the <link xlink:href="http://wiki.freebsd.org/ZFS">ZFS</link>; section of the &os; Wiki.</para> </sect1>
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