Date: Thu, 27 May 2004 21:04:35 +0300 From: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@ceid.upatras.gr> To: Maxim Konovalov <maxim@macomnet.ru> Cc: docs@freebsd.org Subject: Re: isp.xml diff for review Message-ID: <20040527180435.GB2755@gothmog.gr> In-Reply-To: <20040526104834.Y64547@mp3files.int.ru> References: <20040526104834.Y64547@mp3files.int.ru>
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On 2004-05-26 10:50, Maxim Konovalov <maxim@macomnet.ru> wrote: > Hello, > > Could you please review an enclosed diff especially my English. > TIA. > > Index: isp.xml > =================================================================== > RCS file: /home/ncvs/www/en/commercial/isp.xml,v > retrieving revision 1.7 > diff -u -r1.7 isp.xml > --- isp.xml 21 May 2004 17:46:21 -0000 1.7 > +++ isp.xml 26 May 2004 06:47:46 -0000 > @@ -85,4 +85,22 @@ > programming as well as consulting and training. > </description> > </entry> > + > + <entry id="macomnet"> > + <name>MAcomnet telecommunications company, Moscow, Russia</name> > + <url>http://www.macomnet.com/</url>; > + <description> > + CJSC MAcomnet is one of the biggest Moscow telecommunication > + companies founded in 1991 by the Moscow Metropoliten and > + Andrew Corporation (USA). Numerous customers do justice to > + MAcomnet service high quality and level, among them are large > + communications operators, Internet providers, telephone companies, > + banks, hotels, exhibition centers, embassies, well known trading > + companies, government organizations, institutions, industrial > + enterprises, scientific-research institutes, mass media. > + A lot of MAcomnet ISP servers are FreeBSD based. MAcomnet > + hosts cvsup4.ru.FreeBSD.org and cvsup5.ru.FreeBSD.org cvsup > + mirrors. > + </description> > + </entry> > </entries> > %%% The English is fine; well, except for one minor detail anyway. You should probably split the original text's largest sentence in the following two separate sentences: > + Andrew Corporation (USA). Numerous customers do justice to > + MAcomnet service high quality and level. Among them are large > + communications operators, Internet providers, telephone companies, > + banks, hotels, exhibition centers, embassies, well known trading > + companies, government organizations, institutions, industrial > + enterprises, scientific-research institutes, mass media. or something similar. "Among MAcomnet's customers are large..." sounds fine to me too. - Giorgos
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