Date: Wed, 14 Jun 2000 10:22:41 -0400 (EDT) From: Daniel Harris <dannyboy@dannyboy.eyep.net> To: FreeBSD-gnats-submit@freebsd.org Subject: docs/19261: Nits in handbook chapter 1 Message-ID: <200006141422.KAA01893@dannyboy.eyep.net>
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>Number: 19261
>Category: docs
>Synopsis: Nits in handbook chapter 1
>Confidential: no
>Severity: non-critical
>Priority: low
>Responsible: freebsd-doc
>State: open
>Quarter:
>Keywords:
>Date-Required:
>Class: doc-bug
>Submitter-Id: current-users
>Arrival-Date: Wed Jun 14 07:30:01 PDT 2000
>Closed-Date:
>Last-Modified:
>Originator: Daniel Harris
>Release: FreeBSD 4.0-STABLE i386
>Organization:
>Environment:
>Description:
Nits in chapter 1 of the handbook, including comma nits, rewording nits,
an URL nit, and other exciting nits.
>How-To-Repeat:
Read Chapter 1 and look for trivial nits. Find these.
>Fix:
--- chapter.sgml.orig Wed Jun 14 10:09:46 2000
+++ chapter.sgml Wed Jun 14 10:11:57 2000
@@ -113,9 +113,9 @@
<listitem>
<para>Strong <emphasis>TCP/IP networking</emphasis> with
- support for industry standards such as SLIP, PPP, NFS, DHCP
- and NIS support. This means that your FreeBSD machine can
- inter-operate easily with other systems as well act as an
+ support for industry standards such as SLIP, PPP, NFS, DHCP,
+ and NIS. This means that your FreeBSD machine can
+ inter-operate easily with other systems as well as act as an
enterprise server, providing vital functions such as NFS
(remote file access) and e-mail services or putting your
organization on the Internet with WWW, FTP, routing and
@@ -186,7 +186,7 @@
<listitem>
<para><emphasis>Source code</emphasis> for the entire system
means you have the greatest degree of control over your
- environment. Why be locked into a proprietary solution and
+ environment. Why be locked into a proprietary solution
at the mercy of your vendor when you can have a truly Open
System?</para>
</listitem>
@@ -499,7 +499,7 @@
<listitem>
<para>The central source tree for FreeBSD is maintained by
- <ulink url="http://www.cyclic.com/cyclic-pages/CVS-sheet.html">CVS</ulink>;
+ <ulink url="http://www.cyclic.com/CVS/index_html">CVS</ulink>;
(Concurrent Version System), a freely available source code
control tool that comes bundled with FreeBSD. The primary
<ulink url="http://www.FreeBSD.org/cgi/cvsweb.cgi">CVS
@@ -628,7 +628,7 @@
and server support, transaction TCP support, dial-on-demand PPP,
integrated DHCP support, an improved SCSI subsystem, ISDN support,
support for ATM, FDDI, Fast and Gigabit Ethernet (1000Mbit)
- adapters, improved support for the latest Adaptec controllers and
+ adapters, improved support for the latest Adaptec controllers, and
many hundreds of bug fixes.</para>
<para>We have also taken the comments and suggestions of many of our
@@ -637,13 +637,13 @@
this (constantly evolving) process is especially welcome!</para>
<para>In addition to the base distributions, FreeBSD offers a
- ported software collection with hundreds of commonly sought-after
+ ported software collection with thousands of commonly sought-after
programs. By mid-January 2000, there were nearly 3000 ports! The
list of ports ranges from http (WWW) servers, to games, languages,
- editors and almost everything in between. The entire ports
+ editors, and almost everything in between. The entire ports
collection requires approximately 50MB of storage, all ports being
expressed as <quote>deltas</quote> to their original sources. This
- makes it much easier for us to update ports, and greatly reduces
+ makes it much easier for us to update ports, and greatly reduces
the disk space demands made by the older 1.0 ports collection. To
compile a port, you simply change to the directory of the program
you wish to install, type <command>make install</command>, and let
@@ -682,7 +682,7 @@
</varlistentry>
</variablelist>
- <para>You can also visit the master (and most frequently updated)
+ <para>You can also view the master (and most frequently updated)
copies at <ulink
url="http://www.FreeBSD.org/">http://www.FreeBSD.org/</ulink>.</para>;
@@ -692,15 +692,15 @@
States, which contains the programs that normally use DES. The
auxiliary packages provided separately can be used by anyone. A
freely (from outside the U.S.) exportable European distribution of
- DES for our non-U.S. users also exists and is described in the
+ DES for our non-U.S. users also exists and is described in the
<ulink url="../FAQ/FAQ.html">FreeBSD FAQ</ulink>.</para>
<para>If password security for FreeBSD is all you need, and you have
no requirement for copying encrypted passwords from different hosts
(Suns, DEC machines, etc) into FreeBSD password entries, then
FreeBSD's MD5 based security may be all you require! We feel that
- our default security model is more than a match for DES, and without
- any messy export issues to deal with. If you are outside (or even
+ our default security model is more than a match for DES, and avoids
+ dealing with any messy export issues. If you are outside (or even
inside) the U.S., give it a try!</para>
</sect2>
</sect1>
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