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Date:      Sat, 10 Jun 2000 19:17:26 -0400 (EDT)
From:      Daniel Harris <dannyboy@dannyboy.eyep.net>
To:        FreeBSD-gnats-submit@freebsd.org
Subject:   docs/19186: Semi-overhaul docs.html
Message-ID:  <200006102317.TAA01072@dannyboy.eyep.net>

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>Number:         19186
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       Semi-overhaul docs.html
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          open
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Sat Jun 10 16:20:01 PDT 2000
>Closed-Date:
>Last-Modified:
>Originator:     Daniel Harris
>Release:        FreeBSD 4.0-STABLE i386
>Organization:
>Environment:

	docs.sgml rev 1.82

>Description:

	Various fixes, nits, etc. Executive Summary:

	Standardize: Remove "This is" type verbiage.
	Tweak FAQ blurb.
	Fix run-on under Additional Resources.
	Add trailing slash to link to Wolfram Schneider's page.	
	Hinrich Eilts's manpage viewer seems to have vanished, remove dead link.
	A couple was/were fixes.

>How-To-Repeat:

	

>Fix:

	(drumroll)


--- docs.sgml.orig	Sat Jun 10 19:03:42 2000
+++ docs.sgml	Sat Jun 10 19:02:56 2000
@@ -32,13 +32,13 @@
 
     <h2><a href="news/press.html">FreeBSD in the Press</a></h2>
 
-    <p>The press about FreeBSD.</p>
+    <p>Articles in the press about FreeBSD.</p>
     
     <a name="y2kbug"></a>
 
     <h2><a href="y2kbug.html">Year 2000 Compatibility</a></h2>
     
-    <p>This is the FreeBSD project's current statement about its Year 2000
+    <p>The FreeBSD project's current statement about its Year 2000
       compatibility.</p>
     
     <a name="newsletter"></a>
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@
     <h2><a href="news/qnewsletter.html">FreeBSD Real-Quick (TM) Newsletter
 	(RQN)</a></h2>
     
-    <p>A monthly (sometimes bi-weekly) newsletter containing recent
+    <p>A monthly (sometimes bi-weekly) newsletter announcing recent
       developments in the FreeBSD arena. Subscribe to freebsd-announce to
       receive this newsletter via e-mail.</p>
 
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@
 
     <h2><a href="handbook/index.html">The FreeBSD Handbook</a></h2>
     
-    <p>This is an evolving, comprehensive on-line resource for FreeBSD users.
+    <p>An evolving, comprehensive on-line resource for FreeBSD users.
       Please address comments and contributions to <a
 	href="mailto:freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG"><tt>&lt;freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG&gt;</tt></a>.</p>
       
@@ -72,9 +72,8 @@
 
     <h2><a href="FAQ/FAQ.html">Frequently Asked Questions (FAQ)</a></h2>
     
-    <p>If you have a question, chances are that someone else has the same
-      question.  The most common of these have been compiled here in a brief
-      question-answer format.</p>
+    <p>If you have a question, chances are that someone else has had it too.
+    The most common of these questions (and answers) have been compiled here.</p>
 
     <p>&i.new; We now offer a <a href="&base/ru/FAQ/">Russian translation</a>
       and a <a href="&base/zh/FAQ/">Chinese translation</a> of the FAQ.</p>
@@ -86,7 +85,7 @@
 
     <h2><a href="tutorials/">Tutorials</a></h2>
     
-    <p>Here lie assorted documents on various aspects of FreeBSD, FreeBSD
+    <p>Assorted documents about various aspects of FreeBSD, FreeBSD
       software, and hardware.  If you have comments or would like to
       contribute a document, please contact us at <a
 	href="mailto:freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG">freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org</a>.</p>
@@ -95,9 +94,9 @@
 
     <h2>Additional Resources</h2>
     
-    <p>www.FreeBSD.org is not the only place to get information on FreeBSD and
-      various independent efforts have also produced a great deal of useful
-      information on FreeBSD:</p>
+    <p>www.FreeBSD.org is not the only place to get information on FreeBSD;
+    various independent efforts have also produced a great deal of useful
+    information about FreeBSD.</p>
 
     <ul>
       <li><p><a href="mailto:mckusick@mckusick.com">Kirk McKusick</a>, one
@@ -139,7 +138,7 @@
 
       <li><p><a
 	    href="http://www.linuxdoc.org/HOWTO/mini/Linux+FreeBSD.html">The
-	    Linux+FreeBSD mini-HOWTO</a> - this document describes how to use
+	    Linux+FreeBSD mini-HOWTO</a> describes how to use
 	  Linux and FreeBSD on the same system.  It introduces FreeBSD and
 	  discusses how the two operating systems can cooperate, e.g. by
 	  sharing swap space.</p>
@@ -221,13 +220,7 @@
     -->
     
     <p>This service is provided courtesy of <a
-	href="http://wolfram.schneider.org">Wolfram Schneider</a>.  There
-      is <a
-	href="http://late5.e-technik.uni-erlangen.de/cgi-bin/bsddocquery.pl">another
-	script</a> available with the manual pages for FreeBSD 2.0 and XFree86
-      release 3.1, courtesy of <a
-	href="http://late5.e-technik.uni-erlangen.de/user/eilts.html">Hinrich
-	Eilts</a>.</p>
+	href="http://wolfram.schneider.org/">Wolfram Schneider</a>.</p>
 
       <a name="44doc"></a>
       
@@ -236,7 +229,7 @@
     <p>If you like reading BSD manuals online, here is a hypertext version of
       the 4.4BSD documents from <a
 	href="file:/usr/share/doc">/usr/share/doc</a>, where you would find
-      the documents on a FreeBSD machine (if the doc distribution was
+      the documents on a FreeBSD machine (if the doc distribution were
       installed).</p>
       
       <a name="info"></a>
@@ -246,7 +239,7 @@
     <p>If you like reading FreeBSD Info documents online, here is a hypertext
       version of the Info documents from <a
 	href="file:/usr/share/info">/usr/share/info</a>, where you would find
-      the Info documents on a FreeBSD machine (if the info distribution was
+      the Info documents on a FreeBSD machine (if the info distribution were
       installed).</p>
 
       <a name="source"></a>
@@ -270,7 +263,7 @@
     
     <h2><a href="http://www.freebsdzine.org/">FreeBSD ezine</a></h2>
 
-    <p>The FreeBSD 'zine is a monthly collection of easy to read (we hope)
+    <p>A monthly collection of easy to read (we hope)
       articles written by FreeBSD users and administrators just like you.</p>
     
     <p>Like FreeBSD itself, this documentation is the product of a volunteer


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