Date: Fri, 14 Jul 1995 10:11:37 -0600 From: kelly@fsl.noaa.gov (Sean Kelly) To: jfieber@grendel.csc.smith.edu Cc: doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: Quick start installation Message-ID: <9507141611.AA07635@emu.fsl.noaa.gov> In-Reply-To: <199507111549.LAA16965@grendel.csc.smith.edu> (jfieber@grendel.csc.smith.edu)
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>>>>> "John" == John Fieber <jfieber@grendel.csc.smith.edu> writes:
John> Please take a look at:
John> http://www.freebsd.org/How/quickstart.html
Looks great. Comments, respectfully submitted:
* Make the link on step number 1 (supported configurations) go right
to the supported configurations page, instead of to `Installing
FreeBSD'; this'll give the reader one-click access to that
information instead of two.
* Concern: when using dd to make a floppy from an image, you might
need to specify the block size on some systems. (I thought you
needed `bs=18b' on FreeBSD as well!) Maybe we should mention this.
* In step five, lowercase-ize ``the'' after the comma.
* In the first paragraph under ``If something goes wrong...'' make
the link to supported configurations go right to supported
configurations (just like the first bullet above).
* In the second paragraph under ``If something goes wrong...'' the
sentence that starts ``This is most likely to be necessary if...''
seems a bit awkward. How about replacing it with something like
``You'll need to do this if...''
* Replace ``[more to come...]'' with substance. :-)
I think this'll be a really nice resource for those who are impatient
or who might just want to quickly get their feet wet with FreeBSD.
--
Sean Kelly
NOAA Forecast Systems Lab, Boulder Colorado USA
Too bad Lassie didn't know how to ice skate, because then if she was
in Holland on vacation in winter and someone said "Lassie, go skate
for help," she could. -- Jack Handey
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