Date: Sun, 1 Aug 2004 07:05:29 +0000 From: Murray Stokely <murray@FreeBSD.org> To: Dmitry Morozovsky <marck@rinet.ru> Cc: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: [patch] update for console-server article Message-ID: <20040801070529.GH27954@hub.freebsd.org> In-Reply-To: <20040731161841.W58234@woozle.rinet.ru> References: <20040731161841.W58234@woozle.rinet.ru>
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On Sat, Jul 31, 2004 at 04:21:49PM +0400, Dmitry Morozovsky wrote: > I was working on translating console-server article for FreeBSD Russian > Documentation Project and found that many parts of it are a bit stale. Thanks. I committed your patch with minor changes. I will explain some of the changes I made below. > <para>This document describes how you can use &os;, hardware and > - software that runs on &os; to set up a <quote>console server</quote>; > + software that runs on &os; to set up a <quote>console server</quote>: This sentence is still awkward, so I just reworded it and broke it into two sentences. > + <para>&os; has adequate support for modern Stallion cards since 4.4 release. > + If you are running &os; 4 from prior to this release, you will need ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ I simplified this to something like 'If you are using an older version of &os;.' > - being used. Download the port framework from <ulink > - URL="conserver-port.tar.gz">here</ulink>, unpack it to create a > - directory called <filename>conserver-port</filename>. Change into > - that directory and (as <username>root</username>) type:</para> > + being used. Use > + <filename role="package">comms/conserver-com</filename> port. The article 'the' should be before the package name here. I reworded this a bit. > + recommend you to use this version as much more appropriate for ^^^^ added 'it is' here. - Murray
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