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Date:      Sun, 12 Oct 2014 21:23:36 +0000 (UTC)
From:      Warren Block <wblock@FreeBSD.org>
To:        doc-committers@freebsd.org, svn-doc-all@freebsd.org, svn-doc-head@freebsd.org
Subject:   svn commit: r45802 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status
Message-ID:  <201410122123.s9CLNaB3084348@svn.freebsd.org>

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Author: wblock
Date: Sun Oct 12 21:23:35 2014
New Revision: 45802
URL: https://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/45802

Log:
  Clarity and consistency edits.

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2014-07-2014-09.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2014-07-2014-09.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2014-07-2014-09.xml	Sun Oct 12 21:04:40 2014	(r45801)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/news/status/report-2014-07-2014-09.xml	Sun Oct 12 21:23:35 2014	(r45802)
@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@
       2014.</p>
 
     <p>The third quarter of 2014 was another productive quarter for
-      the FreeBSD project.  A lot of work has been done on various ARM
+      the &os; project.  A lot of work has been done on various ARM
       platforms, with the goal of bringing them to Tier 1 status in
       &os; 11.  The various ports teams have also worked hard to improve
       the state of &os; as a desktop operating system.  As usual,
@@ -361,7 +361,7 @@
     </links>
 
     <body>
-      <p>ZFS is one of the premier features of &os; and the quality
+      <p>ZFS is one of the premier features of &os;, and the quality
 	of the documentation should match that of other important
 	features.  Much of the original documentation from Sun and
 	Oracle has disappeared, moved, or is about the proprietary
@@ -372,18 +372,17 @@
 	about ZFS than proper documentation.</p>
 
       <p>After over a year of work, a new ZFS chapter has been added
-	to the &os; Handbook.  Over 20,000 words describing the
-	basics of creating, managing and maintaining a ZFS pool, as
-	well as using some of the advanced features like compression,
-	deduplication, and delegation.  The chapter also contains a
+	to the &os; Handbook.  Over 20,000 words describe the
+	basics of creating, managing, and maintaining a ZFS pool.
+	Advanced features like compression,
+	deduplication, and delegation are covered.  The chapter also contains a
 	glossary of terms, explaining a number of the concepts unique
-	to ZFS.  The chapter also includes documentation of some of
-	the many <tt>sysctl</tt> variables that can be used to tune
-	ZFS.</p>
+	to ZFS, and documents some of
+	the many <tt>sysctl</tt> variables that can be used for tuning.</p>
 
-      <p>The remaining work is the FAQ section, which aims to help
+      <p>The remaining work to be done is in the FAQ section, which aims to help
 	users address the most common questions or problems they might
-	face with ZFS.  It would be useful to hear experiences,
+	face with ZFS.  We would like to hear experiences,
 	questions, misconceptions, gotchas, stumbling blocks and
 	suggestions for the FAQ section from other users.  A use cases
 	section that highlights some of the cases where ZFS provides
@@ -602,9 +601,9 @@
       <p>Note that running Asan tests on stable/10 requires that state
 	to be set to 1.</p>
 
-      <p>A similar work dedicated to add &os; support to the thread
+      <p>A similar work is in progress to add &os; support to the thread
 	sanitizer (Tsan), which detects data races in parallel
-	programs, is in progress.</p>
+	programs.</p>
     </body>
   </project>
 
@@ -626,7 +625,7 @@
     </links>
 
     <body>
-      <p>This is a Google Summer of code project that aims to provide
+      <p>This is a Google Summer of code project to provide
 	a noninteractive &os; installation from the network.  In
 	the first part, an implementation was added for scripted
 	<tt>bsdinstall(8)</tt>.  It supports variables such as KEYMAP,
@@ -687,9 +686,9 @@
       <p>MATE is a fork of GNOME 2.  The MATE ports were updated to
 	the 1.8 versions.</p>
 
-      <p>Now that cairo, the vector graphics library used by GNOME,
-	has been updated to 1.12 the merge of GNOME 3 has started.
-	Currently we are doing test builds to find ports broken by the
+      <p>Cairo, the vector graphics library used by GNOME,
+	has been updated to 1.12.  This allowed the merge of GNOME 3 to begin.
+	We are currently doing test builds to find ports broken by the
 	update and pruning ports that do not build any more because of
 	incompatible updates.</p>
 
@@ -1199,7 +1198,7 @@
 
       <task>
 	<p>Write a CAM peripheral driver that implements an interface
-	  to the FreeBSD <tt>disk(9)</tt>.  It will send MMC I/O
+	  to the &os; <tt>disk(9)</tt>.  It will send MMC I/O
 	  commands using the MMC XPT layer.</p>
       </task>
 
@@ -1321,10 +1320,10 @@
 
     <body>
       <p><tt>bhyve</tt> is a hypervisor that runs on the FreeBSD/amd64
-	platform.  At present, it runs FreeBSD (8.x or later), Linux
+	platform.  At present, it runs &os; (8.x or later), Linux
 	i386/x64, OpenBSD i386/amd64, and NetBSD/amd64 guests.
 	Current development is focused on enabling additional guest
-	operating systems, and implementing features found in other
+	operating systems and implementing features found in other
 	hypervisors.</p>
 
       <p>A significant amount of progress has been made since the last
@@ -1367,7 +1366,7 @@
 
 	<li>Virtio RNG device emulation</li>
 
-	<li>Chapter about <tt>bhyve</tt> added to FreeBSD
+	<li>Chapter about <tt>bhyve</tt> added to &os;
 	  Handbook</li>
       </ul>
     </body>
@@ -1853,9 +1852,9 @@
 	The project to update the Intel graphics chipset driver
 	(i915kms) to a recent snapshot of the Linux upstream code
 	continues.  A patch with a large chunk of updates has been
-	made available to check for regressions against current
-	functionality, but is not yet expected to provide fully
-	functional new functionality.  The GEM I/O ioctl code path
+	made available to test for regressions against current
+	functionality, but is not yet expected to provide working new functions.
+	The GEM I/O ioctl code path
 	has been modified to more closely resemble the Linux code
 	structure (easing future imports).
       </p>
@@ -2011,10 +2010,10 @@
     </contact>
 
     <body>
-      <p>CAM Target Layer (CTL), used as base for the kernel iSCSI
+      <p>The CAM Target Layer (CTL), used as base for the kernel iSCSI
 	server, got support for VMWare VAAI and Microsoft ODX
 	storage acceleration.  It permits avoiding network
-	bottlenecks and improved storage efficiency on sets of large
+	bottlenecks and improves storage efficiency on sets of large
 	operations, such as virtual machine (or large file) creation,
 	initialization to zeros, copy, delete, etc..</p>
 
@@ -2250,7 +2249,7 @@
       <p>In mid-July, &os;&nbsp;9.3-RELEASE was released without delay
 	in release cycle.</p>
 
-      <p>In late August, &os;&nbsp;10.1-RELEASE cycle began, and as of
+      <p>In late August, the &os;&nbsp;10.1-RELEASE cycle began, and as of
 	this writing, is expected to stay on schedule.</p>
 
       <p>Work has continued to produce virtual machine images as part



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