Date: Sat, 11 Dec 2010 01:18:33 +0900 (JST) From: Ryusuke SUZUKI <ryusuke@FreeBSD.org> To: glen.j.barber@gmail.com Cc: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: newbies page (ppp) Message-ID: <20101211.011833.193776160.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <4D00E2C8.8020206@gmail.com> References: <20101209.223154.193764232.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> <4D00E2C8.8020206@gmail.com>
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ryusuke> How about the following patch?
ryusuke>
ryusuke> diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml
ryusuke> snip...
ryusuke> + <li><p>There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp.
ryusuke> + You might start with at least those parts of the
glen> I think with this rewording, "at least" can be removed.
Thanks. "at leaset" is removed and clarify "those parts" as following,
diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml
--- newbies.sgml 9 Aug 2009 12:58:45 -0000 1.58
+++ newbies.sgml 9 Dec 2010 15:29:53 -0000
@@ -70,11 +70,10 @@
beginners. You do not have to know much about anything to enjoy
this one.</p></li>
- <li><p>The first thing many people need to set up is ppp, and there is
- a lot of documentation to help. You might start with at least those
- parts of the
- <a href="&url.books;/handbook/index.html">Handbook</a>
- that are relevant to your needs, and explore the
+ <li><p>There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp.
+ You might start with the <a
+ href="&url.books;/handbook/ppp-and-slip.html">PPP and SLIP</a>
+ chapter of the FreeBSD Handbook that are relevant to your needs, and explore the
<a href="http://www.awfulhak.org/ppp.html">ppp page</a>
for links to the other valuable information and the latest updates.</p></li>
Regards,
Ryusuke
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