Date: Tue, 31 Jan 2012 14:07:51 -0700 (MST) From: Warren Block <wblock@wonkity.com> To: Benedict Reuschling <bcr@freebsd.org> Cc: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: New Handbook Section for Review - graid3 Message-ID: <alpine.BSF.2.00.1201311359260.97077@wonkity.com> In-Reply-To: <4F285145.9030505@FreeBSD.org> References: <20120131104953.GA55314@freefall.freebsd.org> <4F285145.9030505@FreeBSD.org>
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On Tue, 31 Jan 2012, Benedict Reuschling wrote:
> + <note>
> + <para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from
> + <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, such configuration
> + is not common and is not advised. As such, this section
> + does not provide description of how to accomplish such
> + configuration.</para>
> + </note>
>
> How about reducing the "such" word count in the last sentence? How about
> "... of how to accomplish this kind of configuration." or "... this type
> of configuration." ?
I suggested
<para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from a
<acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, such a configuration
is not common and is not advised. As such, this section
does not describe how to accomplish that
configuration.</para>
That still could be better.
<para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from a
<acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, that configuration
is uncommon and not advised. As such, this section
does not describe how to accomplish it.</para>
Actually, the last sentence is kind of a "this page intentionally left
blank":
<para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from a
<acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, that configuration
is uncommon and not advised.</para>
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