Date: Wed, 13 May 2009 17:20:58 +0000 (UTC) From: Manolis Kiagias <manolis@FreeBSD.org> To: doc-committers@FreeBSD.org, cvs-doc@FreeBSD.org, cvs-all@FreeBSD.org Subject: cvs commit: doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/firewalls chapter.sgml Message-ID: <200905131720.n4DHKwnZ045629@repoman.freebsd.org>
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manolis 2009-05-13 17:20:58 UTC
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Modified files:
en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/firewalls chapter.sgml
Log:
A revamp of Handbook's 'firewalls' chapter.
This is a rather lengthy patch, that attempts to fix several problems:
- Reduce repetition. There are several paragraphs in the original text that are repeated throughout the sections
- Markup fixes. Replace single quotes with <literal> tags, add <acronym>s and several other changes to improve markup consistency
- Convert to passive voice where possible, eliminate few first person references
- Several grammar and language fixes
- The original text implied that the same TCP packet would go back and forth between source and destination. Rephrase relevant paragraphs to clarify these are different packets
- Includes many fixes submitted in a PR [1] and a link fix submitted on -doc [2]
- Numerous other smaller changes, too many to mention here
PR: docs/131568 [1]
Submitted by: Chris Pepper <pepper@cbio.mskcc.org> [1]
Submitted by: Phillip Nordwall <Phillip.Nordwall@wwu.edu> [2]
Reviewed by: trhodes, keramida
Revision Changes Path
1.87 +452 -502 doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/firewalls/chapter.sgml
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