Date: Fri, 10 Dec 2010 12:15:05 -0500 From: Glen Barber <glen.j.barber@gmail.com> To: Ryusuke SUZUKI <ryusuke@FreeBSD.org> Cc: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: newbies page (ppp) Message-ID: <4D026019.20408@gmail.com> In-Reply-To: <20101211.011833.193776160.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> References: <20101209.223154.193764232.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> <4D00E2C8.8020206@gmail.com> <20101211.011833.193776160.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org>
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On 12/10/10 11:18 AM, Ryusuke SUZUKI wrote: > > ryusuke> How about the following patch? > ryusuke> > ryusuke> diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml > > ryusuke> snip... > > ryusuke> + <li><p>There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp. > ryusuke> + You might start with at least those parts of the > > glen> I think with this rewording, "at least" can be removed. > > Thanks. "at leaset" is removed and clarify "those parts" as following, > > diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml > --- newbies.sgml 9 Aug 2009 12:58:45 -0000 1.58 > +++ newbies.sgml 9 Dec 2010 15:29:53 -0000 > @@ -70,11 +70,10 @@ > beginners. You do not have to know much about anything to enjoy > this one.</p></li> > > - <li><p>The first thing many people need to set up is ppp, and there is > - a lot of documentation to help. You might start with at least those > - parts of the > - <a href="&url.books;/handbook/index.html">Handbook</a> > - that are relevant to your needs, and explore the > + <li><p>There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp. > + You might start with the <a > + href="&url.books;/handbook/ppp-and-slip.html">PPP and SLIP</a> > + chapter of the FreeBSD Handbook that are relevant to your needs, and explore the Not to sound pedantic, but maybe 's/FreeBSD/&os;/' too? :) Best regards, -- Glen Barber
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