Date: Wed, 03 Dec 2008 20:43:26 +0100 From: Gabor PALI <pgj@FreeBSD.org> To: Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> Cc: Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org>, freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook Message-ID: <4936E15E.8000804@FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <49359EA1.3080600@gmail.com> References: <493155ED.8020004@FreeBSD.org> <49316309.1050407@gmail.com> <49330A66.8040801@FreeBSD.org> <20081201091730.0ef555fa.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> <49359784.504@FreeBSD.org> <49359EA1.3080600@gmail.com>
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Manolis Kiagias wrote: > I like the improvements too :) > If I were to make a few changes (at the edge of these being doc-bikesheds): Absolutely not, it IS suggested by the FDP Primer [1]: ``Avoid redundant phrases Try not to use redundant phrases. In particular, "the command", "the file", and "man command" are probably redundant.'' Hopefully, I will reach this section of the FDP Primer in the Hungarian translation soon :) Thanks for the comment! I fixed the parts in question, so you can proof-check the results here: (in HTML:) http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH (in unified diff format:) http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/splash.screen.section.patch.diff Regards, :g [1] http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en/books/fdp-primer/writing-style.html
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