Date: Mon, 14 Oct 2002 21:40:36 -0700 From: Rogelio Rodriguez <rogelio@rogelior.dyndns.org> To: "Gary W. Swearingen" <swear@attbi.com> Cc: doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: (English) syntax question (handbook-related) Message-ID: <20021015044036.GA94168@rogelior.dyndns.org> In-Reply-To: <5wbs5w8jk7.s5w@localhost.localdomain> References: <20021015021319.GH48094@rogelior.dyndns.org> <5wbs5w8jk7.s5w@localhost.localdomain>
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On Mon, Oct 14, 2002 at 08:31:04PM -0700, Gary W. Swearingen wrote: >Rogelio Rodriguez <rogelio@rogelior.dyndns.org> writes: > >> "Once you have travelled this far" acts like a conjunctive phrase (in >> this sentence) but there appears to be need for it. A cursory reading >> reveals no >> >> errors but it is probably more correct (and easier to read) without it. > >I have no idea what a conjunctive phrase is, but I agree that the >paragraph would be better without the clause. > >The clause was probably meant to build on the prior use of the word >"explore", to lend a bit of "style" to the introduction. It might be >grammatically correct, but I see three errors in it: 1) It should have >used "that" instead of "this", because "this" is most naturally read as >the point where "this" is used, not where one is located after working >through or exploring the first section. 2) The rest of the paragraph is >true even before "you have travelled this far", not just once you have >done so. 3) It seems disjointed and just doesn't read well, like you >implied. I agree (with 2 and 3). And, I certainly find it syntactically dubious. Maybe it's just me though. :) -- Rogelio Rodriguez To Unsubscribe: send mail to majordomo@FreeBSD.org with "unsubscribe freebsd-doc" in the body of the messagehelp
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