Date: Sat, 27 Aug 2005 23:16:00 +0300 From: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@ceid.upatras.gr> To: "Gary W. Swearingen" <garys@opusnet.com> Cc: docs@freebsd.org Subject: Re: docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook. Message-ID: <20050827201600.GC643@gothmog.gr> In-Reply-To: <nzd5nzmba9.5nz@mail.opusnet.com> References: <20050827161157.0DA1D73027@titeuf.thilelli.net> <nzd5nzmba9.5nz@mail.opusnet.com>
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On 2005-08-27 12:26, "Gary W. Swearingen" <garys@opusnet.com> wrote: > Julien Gabel <jpeg@thilelli.net> writes: > > <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly > > - created disk stripe.</para> > > + created disk stripe:</para> > > It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be > redundant in sentences that ends with ":". > > In decreasing order of verbosity: > > The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created > disk stripe. > > This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe: > > To manually mount a newly created disk stripe: Right. I usually prefer the style of the last one. It contains all the useful information and doesn't include redundant stuff.
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