Date: Fri, 30 May 2003 22:30:13 -0400 From: Jim Brown <jpb@sixshooter.v6.thrupoint.net> To: FreeBSD-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: RFC: Quick review for an install chapter patch Message-ID: <20030531023013.GA64480@sixshooter.v6.thrupoint.net> In-Reply-To: <20030528114506.56fe32e6.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> References: <20030528114506.56fe32e6.trhodes@FreeBSD.org>
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* Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org> [2003-05-28 11:57]: > Greetings, > > I've attached a patch for review. This should be a drop-in replacement > for the MS-DOS Q&A section in the troubleshooting section. Any comments > would be of a great help to me. > > Thanks! > > -- > Tom Rhodes Hi Tom, Here is my quick review. Patching a patch gives me a headache so I've just included the lines I'm interested in with my suggestion below each one. + partition and allowing you to install onto the second free piece. "data in the first half and allowing you to install &os; onto the other half." + You first need too defragment your MS-DOS partition using the Windows™ Incorrect use of "too"; use "to" here. + if you plan to add/remove operating systems often. It does cost money, and if Use "so" instead of "and" here. + <application>Double Space™</application> application. Therefor the file "Therefore" + produce enough information too give an idea of the partition layout.</para> Incorrect use of "too"; use "to" here. Hope this helps, jpb ===
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