Date: Tue, 15 Jan 2008 00:53:28 +0200 From: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@ceid.upatras.gr> To: gregoryd.freebsd@free.fr Cc: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: docs/119463: [handbook] [patch] typo in printing/chapter.sgml Message-ID: <20080114225327.GC3380@kobe.laptop> In-Reply-To: <1200344044.478bcbecb1228@imp.free.fr> References: <200801141342.m0EDgjCB069055@freefall.freebsd.org> <1200344044.478bcbecb1228@imp.free.fr>
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On 2008-01-14 21:54, gregoryd.freebsd@free.fr wrote: > Quoting keramida@FreeBSD.org: > > - <para>You should also specify the <literal>rw</literal> capability; > > - that tells <application>LPD</application> to open the printer in > > - read-write mode.</para> > > + <para>You should also specify the <literal>rw</literal> capability. > > + When this capability is present, <application>LPD</application> > > + opens the printer in read-write mode.</para> > > > > Does this look better? > > I guess we should avoid the repetition of "capability", though (the fdp-primer, > "writing style" invites us to). > What do you think of something like: " When present, it tells LPD to open the > printer in r/w mode". > My, I'm starting to feel like a fussy guy, now... :-\ "When present, it tells LPD to..." has two minor nits which I don't really like a lot: * It lacks a subject for "present". When "what" is present? * It uses "it" to refer to the non-existent subject. I'm not sure if this rewrite is better, but I'm certainly open to more suggestions.
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