Date: Mon, 12 Jul 2004 02:55:07 +0000 (UTC) From: Murray Stokely <murray@FreeBSD.org> To: doc-committers@FreeBSD.org, cvs-doc@FreeBSD.org, cvs-all@FreeBSD.org Subject: cvs commit: doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/mac chapter.sgml Message-ID: <200407120255.i6C2t7fR096893@repoman.freebsd.org>
next in thread | raw e-mail | index | archive | help
murray 2004-07-12 02:55:07 UTC
FreeBSD doc repository
Modified files:
en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/mac chapter.sgml
Log:
* Notes in <warning> should not begin with 'Please note that'. The
<warning> tag already expresses this information and so the text will
be rendered appropriately.
* Improve wording in synopsis.
* Remove redundant sentences and simplify section about what will not
be covered in this chapter.
* Omit unnecessary words and improve grammar as appropriate
* Remove redundant paragraph.
* Use serial comma in list of elements, as mandated by doc project primer.
Revision Changes Path
1.10 +27 -37 doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/mac/chapter.sgml
Want to link to this message? Use this URL: <https://mail-archive.FreeBSD.org/cgi/mid.cgi?200407120255.i6C2t7fR096893>