Date: Tue, 31 Jan 2012 21:38:29 +0100 From: Benedict Reuschling <bcr@FreeBSD.org> To: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: New Handbook Section for Review - graid3 Message-ID: <4F285145.9030505@FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <20120131104953.GA55314@freefall.freebsd.org> References: <20120131104953.GA55314@freefall.freebsd.org>
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-----BEGIN PGP SIGNED MESSAGE----- Hash: SHA1 Am 31.01.12 11:49, schrieb Daniel Gerzo: > Hello everybody, > > A new Handbook section covering graid3 is now available for review; > the patch is attached. > > The text is based on PR 164228. A built version is available at > http://people.freebsd.org/~danger/geom-raid3.html. > > Comments are welcome. > Hello Daniel, thanks for doing the work on this PR. I've reviewed the patch. Overall, it looks good, but I would enhance the following section a bit: + <sect2> + <title>Creating Dedicated <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 Array</title> I would write "Creating A Dedicated <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 Array" since it is also mentioned in the text like this. + <note> + <para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from + <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, such configuration + is not common and is not advised. As such, this section + does not provide description of how to accomplish such + configuration.</para> + </note> How about reducing the "such" word count in the last sentence? How about "... of how to accomplish this kind of configuration." or "... this type of configuration." ? Regards Benedict Reuschling FreeBSD Documentation Committer The FreeBSD Documentation Project FreeBSD German Documentation Project - https://doc.bsdgroup.de -----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE----- Version: GnuPG v1.4.8 (Darwin) Comment: GPGTools - http://gpgtools.org Comment: Using GnuPG with Mozilla - http://enigmail.mozdev.org/ iEYEARECAAYFAk8oUUUACgkQTSZQLkqBk0iWpACfaZMRtE7qd1KJUQqYdDxYlI8L MIgAnRWT6Jx2DUz6EvzpkMOpQ3RYIHvU =qPM7 -----END PGP SIGNATURE-----
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