Date: Sat, 9 Mar 2002 08:50:02 -0800 (PST) From: Tom Rhodes <darklogik@pittgoth.com> To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: docs/35683: [PATCH] Fix amd info Message-ID: <200203091650.g29Go2A89706@freefall.freebsd.org>
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From: Tom Rhodes <darklogik@pittgoth.com>
To: FreeBSD-gnats-submit@FreeBSD.org
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Subject: Re: docs/35683: [PATCH] Fix amd info
Date: Sat, 9 Mar 2002 11:43:56 -0500 (EST)
I like your suggestion Udo, I killed the nitpick word "the" and
did a little more than just that. This patch is a tad bit larger,
and I would either like some comments or a commit. I did not like
the use of the word "access" 3 times in one sentence. Here is a proposed
rewording of that sentence, natd section.
--
Tom Rhodes
diff -ru handbook/advanced-networking/chapter.sgml handbook.new/advanced-networking/chapter.sgml
--- handbook/advanced-networking/chapter.sgml Thu Mar 7 18:55:11 2002
+++ handbook.new/advanced-networking/chapter.sgml Sat Mar 9 11:37:19 2002
@@ -988,13 +988,13 @@
<indexterm><primary>automatic mounter daemon</primary></indexterm>
<para>&man.amd.8; (the automatic mounter daemon)
- is a useful daemon that automatically mounts a
+ automatically mounts a
remote filesystem whenever a file or directory within that
filesystem is accessed. Filesystems that are inactive for a
period of time will also be automatically unmounted by
<application>amd</application>. Using
<application>amd</application> provides a simple alternative
- to permanent mounts, as permanent mounts should be listed in the
+ to permanent mounts, as permanent mounts are usually listed in
<filename>/etc/fstab</filename>.</para>
<para><application>amd</application> operates by attaching
@@ -4796,7 +4796,7 @@
<title>Setup</title>
<para>Due to the diminishing IP space in IPv4, and the increased number
of users on high-speed consumer lines such as cable or DSL, people are
- in more and more need of an Internet Connection Sharing solution. The
+ more in need of an Internet Connection Sharing solution. The
ability to connect several computers online through one connection and
IP address makes &man.natd.8; a reasonable choice.</para>
@@ -4831,9 +4831,9 @@
</textobject>
</mediaobject>
- <para>With this setup, the machine without Internet access can use
- the machine with access as a gateway to access the outside
- world.</para>
+ <para>With a setup such as this, a machine not connected to the
+ internet directly can still access the internet through
+ the <acronym>LAN</acronym>.</para>
</sect2>
<sect2 id="configuration">
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