Date: Thu, 18 Feb 2010 23:14:54 -0800 From: Doug Barton <dougb@FreeBSD.org> To: John Baldwin <jhb@freebsd.org> Cc: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org, Jonathan Vasquez <jvasquez1011@gmail.com> Subject: Re: Confusing sentence Message-ID: <4B7E3A6E.3070806@FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <201002171356.37409.jhb@freebsd.org> References: <c2e360c71002141112u59a62e6p7984152701a8722@mail.gmail.com> <201002171356.37409.jhb@freebsd.org>
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On 02/17/10 10:56, John Baldwin wrote: > On Sunday 14 February 2010 2:12:15 pm Jonathan Vasquez wrote: >> URL: >> http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/version-guide/past-schedules.html >> >> <http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/version-guide/past-schedules.html>SENTENCE: >> "These considerations, rather than any kind of keeping up with the major >> release number of any other OS, comprise the main motivation for the >> scheduling changes going forward." >> >> IMPROVED: "Taking the above into consideration, we have learned that it's >> better to not rush development because another OS released a major version." > > The wording could definitely use improvement, but I don't think the new > sentence has the same meaning. It is more like "we are speeding up the > frequency of releases, but for reasons X, Y, and Z; not to keep with other OS > version numbers." > > Perhaps just splitting it up into two sentence so it is less of a mouthful: > > These considerations are the motivation for the scheduling changes going > forward. The schedule is not being changed to "keep pace" with other OS > versions. IMO better not to mention others at all. I would just nuke the whole last sentence. Doug -- ... and that's just a little bit of history repeating. -- Propellerheads Improve the effectiveness of your Internet presence with a domain name makeover! http://SupersetSolutions.com/
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