Date: Tue, 30 Aug 2011 08:41:09 -0600 (MDT) From: Warren Block <wblock@wonkity.com> To: Craig Rodrigues <rodrigc@crodrigues.org> Cc: kan@freebsd.org, rmacklem@freebsd.org, freebsd-doc@freebsd.org, alfred@freebsd.org Subject: Re: PXE Booting with an NFS root file system Message-ID: <alpine.BSF.2.00.1108300808040.46886@wonkity.com> In-Reply-To: <CAG=rPVenPP0n5uu8JGAksyTbPW3zMfxz%2BEJNvsPZ=o4P_pex3A@mail.gmail.com> References: <CAG=rPVenPP0n5uu8JGAksyTbPW3zMfxz%2BEJNvsPZ=o4P_pex3A@mail.gmail.com>
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On Mon, 29 Aug 2011, Craig Rodrigues wrote: > http://people.freebsd.org/~rodrigc/doc/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/network-pxe-nfs.html > > and the patch is here: > > http://people.freebsd.org/~rodrigc/nfs-pxe.diff.txt > > > Can I get some feedback on this? Overall, looks quite good. A few minor suggestions: 31.8.1 "5. Enable inetd" Use &man.inetd.8; instead of plain "inetd". Might be needed for other commands, or at least the first mention of them. "11. Replace "myhost.mydomain.com" with the hostname" Use <replaceable>myhost.example.com</replaceable>, maybe also use it in the programlisting. "14. Customize the ${NFSROOTDIR} in a chroot environment by" Can be read three ways: 1. "Customize the ${NFSROOTDIR}-in-a-chroot-environment by" 2. "Customize the ${NFSROOTDIR}-in-a-chroot's environment by" 3. "Customize the ${NFSROOTDIR} by using a chroot environment" Some rearrangement of that sentence could help. Thanks!
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