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Date:      Wed, 20 Feb 2002 17:16:59 +0000
From:      George Reid <greid@FreeBSD.org>
To:        Tom Rhodes <darklogik@pittgoth.com>
Cc:        freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org
Subject:   Re: docs/35098: [new patch] handbook NFS, sorry
Message-ID:  <20020220171659.A53662@FreeBSD.org>
In-Reply-To: <200202200530.g1K5U3Q13772@freefall.freebsd.org>; from darklogik@pittgoth.com on Tue, Feb 19, 2002 at 09:30:03PM -0800
References:  <200202200530.g1K5U3Q13772@freefall.freebsd.org>

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On Tue, Feb 19, 2002 at 09:30:03PM -0800, Tom Rhodes wrote:

A couple of comments...

>  Major apologies, lol.  I was reading over the diff on the pr
>  site, and noticed some mistakes, and improvments that could and should
>  be made.  So, here again, another patch, fixing a few spelling
>  errors, and even some grammer ;)

Grammar :P

>  -    <para>NFS has several benefits:</para>
>  +    <para>Some of the benefits for using <acronym>NFS</acronym> are:</para>

Should be "benefits of".  What was wrong with the old text, besides the 
omission of <acronym>?

>  +      <para><acronym>NFS</acronym> consists of at least two main parts; a client

Should be a colon, not a semicolon.

>  -      <para>Read the &man.fstab.5; manual page for more options.</para>
>  +      <para>The &man.fstab.5; manual page will show many more options
>  +        that are available here.</para>

This does not make sense.  Did you mean "...than are available here" or 
"...that are not available here"?

>  +	  <para>Setup several machines on a network to share a CDROM or
>  +	    floppy drive among them.  This is cheaper and often more convenient.</para>

"to setup" is not a verb.

-- 
George C A Reid			   Tel: (08701) 200870  Ext. 26654
FreeBSD Committer/Developer             greid@FreeBSD.org
Oriel College, Oxford University        george.reid@oriel.ox.ac.uk

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